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[supernaturalsue]

Story Or Series Title: Time and Eternity
link:http://www.fanfiction.net/s/2700870/1/
Fandom: X-Men the Movie
Culprit Author's Name: Thymewaster
link:http://www.fanfiction.net/u/946104/

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[megami_chan65]

Hnn, I'd give this Suethor points for actually being able to write coherently. Not to mention the story itself does kinda intrigue me. However, I take away a whole bunch of points for the blaring Mary Sue traits, the foremost being she has an excessive amount of powers. And seriously, who calls their child ETERNITY, least of all Logan!? But I wouldn't say this fic is beyond rescue. Just cut back on her abilities, give her a name that Logan might actually give her, and this may actually turn out to be a good story.

[athenaltena]

Decent writing abilities, but definately a Sue. And don't get me started on how someone could genetically inherit an adamantium skeleton...

[alryssa]

KILL IT WITH FIRE.

[mcity]

Um, Colossus doesn't wear armour. He actually turns to metal. She would be killing him.

[midnightvoyager]

I'm glad someone else noticed this...