Fic time!:)

[mary_v]

Alright, everyone. Here it is, my Never Been Kissed fic!

If you have any suggestions as to where else I could post it (other than ff.net - that's done:P), please share!

Title: Revenge is a dish best served unintentionally.
Author: mary-v
Genre: Romance/Humour. Fluff alert!. Also some action.;)
Rating: PG-13 for some (mild) swearing and sexy time.

Comments

[aries11]

*melts into a pile of gooey loveliness*

Awwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwww!!!!!!!!!! That was so cute! I could totally see that as where the movie would've picked up where it left off. I loved it! Especially when Sam punched out Billy Prince! xD That jerk had it coming to him. The proposal scene at the end was cute, too.

My only critique, dear, is when you first introduced Lana's husband. You initially said he was Luke, but then in the same paragraph you also had him as Karl. I don't know if I just wasn't reading that correctly, or Karl was actually another character, but you might want to go reread that part and fix it, just so it makes sense. Continuity is important, even in fanfiction. :)

Thanks so much for posting that! It was a great way to start out my morning.

[mary_v]

ARGH! See you're totally right! I changed Karl's name to Luke, and I guess I got distracted so I forgot to change his name! ARRRRGH! I'll fix that right now! Thank you for picking that up and actually telling me about it!:)

But thank you so much for your review! And I'm really glad you enjoyed it!:DDD Thank you so so much! <3

[last_archangel]

Awwwwwww.....

I love how you tagged this with "Michael Vartan." ^_^

[mary_v]

hehe I simply couldn't resist!:D

And thank you!:D