I'm gonna keep using this icon until Hornblower is back aboard the Hotspur and under Bush's care. :D
Anyways, I really love your POV of Bush's frustration, and his own questioning of competency. It is very refreshing to know that at this stage of his life and career, Bush is actually quite insecure, one year and a few months removed from what had happened on the Renown. Even then he was not too sure about his ability to command as a 1st lieutenant so I am glad you expressed this nicely in this chapter.
If I may, just a little nitpick, but instead of using ALL CAPS to emphasize, have you thought about using italics instead? I think it gets the point across without making the reading a little jarring. Just a thought - ignore if you wish.
I'm glad you're liking my Bush POV--he's much harder for me to pin down than Hornblower, and I find myself adopting a single track mind to approach him--a 'what would Bush be worried about at this exact moment?' kind of thing. But doing that has made me realize how great a captain he probably was, because I think a lot of sailing success has to do with practicality, and that on-the-spot decision making (or it seems to me, anyway, from my bullshitting XD).
As for CAPS! I admit my distinction between caps and italics is a bit subjective, but it's not entirely arbitrary :). Italics gives emphasize, but doesn't (to me) give volume/intensity. You can emphasize something without conveying how important it is to you! Interestingly, my Bush POV chapters seem to be the only one's with all caps, so maybe it has more to do with my mood and mind-set while writing . . . *speculative self-analysis* . . . I'll keep it in mind, but no promises one won't sneak its way in!
If I ever encounter Paul McGann, I want him to speak my "leave a message after the beep" message on my cell. Then I can claim that I have both the 8th Doctor and Lt. Bush as my messenger.
I liked your Bush POV, especially his insecurities about having to assume command. Very refreshing from the experienced Bush I'm currently writing. I was thinking of writing more Bush POV but in his earlier years, so if you don't mind, I'd like to borrow leaflets from you.
*takes construction paper and builds several origami sailing ships* hey...look at that...I built a squadron for Hornblower... no Bush-shaped appearances though...must've done something wrong. :(
*grabs the TARDIS and goes back in time to steal the 8th Doctor away* ^_^
Happy face.custardalexOctober 7 2011, 21:00:25 UTC
I am glad to see that someone out there is still writing Hornblower fan-fiction, and writing it well at that!
I am very impressed with the pictures and maps to illustrate and I think the characterisation is wonderful so far. I am looking forwards to reading more.
I loved the bit in part I when Hornblower grabbed Bush's arm and apologised, rapidly followed by Bush holding Hornblower's hand. Although this is quite emotional for the pair, I think its the perfect level of emotion for them and I thought it was really sweet in its beautiful simplicity. :-)
Thank you! Looking forwards to the rest!
Yours, A very fussy fanfic reader with her socks blown off! :-D
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Anyways, I really love your POV of Bush's frustration, and his own questioning of competency. It is very refreshing to know that at this stage of his life and career, Bush is actually quite insecure, one year and a few months removed from what had happened on the Renown. Even then he was not too sure about his ability to command as a 1st lieutenant so I am glad you expressed this nicely in this chapter.
If I may, just a little nitpick, but instead of using ALL CAPS to emphasize, have you thought about using italics instead? I think it gets the point across without making the reading a little jarring. Just a thought - ignore if you wish.
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I'm glad you're liking my Bush POV--he's much harder for me to pin down than Hornblower, and I find myself adopting a single track mind to approach him--a 'what would Bush be worried about at this exact moment?' kind of thing. But doing that has made me realize how great a captain he probably was, because I think a lot of sailing success has to do with practicality, and that on-the-spot decision making (or it seems to me, anyway, from my bullshitting XD).
As for CAPS! I admit my distinction between caps and italics is a bit subjective, but it's not entirely arbitrary :). Italics gives emphasize, but doesn't (to me) give volume/intensity. You can emphasize something without conveying how important it is to you! Interestingly, my Bush POV chapters seem to be the only one's with all caps, so maybe it has more to do with my mood and mind-set while writing . . . *speculative self-analysis* . . . I'll keep it in mind, but no promises one won't sneak its way in!
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I liked your Bush POV, especially his insecurities about having to assume command. Very refreshing from the experienced Bush I'm currently writing. I was thinking of writing more Bush POV but in his earlier years, so if you don't mind, I'd like to borrow leaflets from you.
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Now children, swirl these around on the floor until something Bush-shaped appears--" XD
I mean, any assistance I can provide . . . :)
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*grabs the TARDIS and goes back in time to steal the 8th Doctor away* ^_^
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I am very impressed with the pictures and maps to illustrate and I think the characterisation is wonderful so far. I am looking forwards to reading more.
I loved the bit in part I when Hornblower grabbed Bush's arm and apologised, rapidly followed by Bush holding Hornblower's hand. Although this is quite emotional for the pair, I think its the perfect level of emotion for them and I thought it was really sweet in its beautiful simplicity. :-)
Thank you! Looking forwards to the rest!
Yours,
A very fussy fanfic reader with her socks blown off! :-D
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