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vejiraziel in martinicruiser

Five down and one more to go.

Dec 31, 2008 03:04

Title: Where there is - Black and White 5/6 ( Read more... )

Comments 19

feeling_brave December 31 2008, 11:12:24 UTC

this is my favourite of these stories, the first three paragraphs had my skin crawling, but Prowl and Jazz refusing to give up on him when everyone else had is so heart warming. "the darkness of his spark dissipated under the blinding light of the two mechs' love." is perfect. love it.

vejiraziel January 1 2009, 03:54:45 UTC

I'm glad you liked it. I thought this would be an unusual but interesting origin story for Bluestreak, and wanted to show how Prowl and Jazz could affect the lives of others in positive ways.

gogglehead84 December 31 2008, 14:26:27 UTC

Aww, and yay for Blue :D.

vejiraziel January 1 2009, 03:55:05 UTC

Blue's such a cute even when he's being a bad boy.

gogglehead84 January 1 2009, 04:42:38 UTC

Mmhmm, it's true. That's why you can't help but love him :D.

eerian_sadow December 31 2008, 15:31:01 UTC

an interesting take on a bluestreak background. i like it. and i love how you constantly used the light/dark theme--it really gave something to the fic.

*waves pom poms* you can do it! only one fic left to finish the challenge and 13 and a half hours to do it in!

vejiraziel January 1 2009, 03:56:28 UTC

Well, I liked the idea of playing around with those words for the fic. And yeah, I felt like playing with Bluestreak having a different, unsual origin. Glad you liked it!

bluebirdsoaring December 31 2008, 16:01:23 UTC

Beautiful story for Bluestreak =)Love can find a way!!

vejiraziel January 1 2009, 03:56:49 UTC

Love can always find a way. =w= v

mmouse15 December 31 2008, 16:47:58 UTC

No, no, this is good Veji. Not confusing at all - very empathetic and awesome. You captured the wildness of an abandoned sparkling very well, and the fact that you wrote it from Bluestreak's POV made it all the better to read. It's beautiful. The little touches really add to the poignacy of the story - the stealing of energon and credits was really good, as were the responses of Jazz and Prowl to those passive-aggressive behaviors of Blue.

It's a beautiful story, Veji.

vejiraziel January 1 2009, 04:01:05 UTC

I'll admit I wanted to have a fic where one wouldn't realize right away who this character was, and what impact Prowl and Jazz had on his life till the very end, so I was afraid that'd make it confusing. I've always found that being yelled or hit rarely works to help the attitudes of that kind of wild mechlings, I think Prowl and Jazz would be quite a 'team' figuring the best way so help Bluestreak through that, between Jazz's empathy and Prowl's analysis. XD