Fic: Lucky, for xysabridde

[talkingtothesky]

Title: Lucky
Author: talkingtothesky
Recipient: xysabridde
Rating: Blue Cortina (swearing, blood, one rude joke)
Word Count: 1,930
Prompt: 'A stakeout goes wrong, and both boys pay the price. Bonus points for Gene getting whumped worse than Sam, and bonus bonus points and pink wafers for comforting Sam/Gene.'
Notes: Sam/Gene established. The second part of this is really

Comments

[xysabridde]

AWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWW <3333333333333333 SKY THANK YOU SO MUCHHHHHHHHHHH!

This is gorgeous. Gorgeous gorgeous <3333 I love how you contrast the tedium of the first part, waiting and watching, and then the sudden excitement and GENE GETS SHOT AWWW AND COMFORT SAM N'AWWWWW *ahem* Ehm, how you contrast the relative tedium and the sudden excitement. That got me. *ahem*

And Sam stroking Gene's chest and sitting on his lap <3333 fheuisfgliogrytgy boys stoppit, you're too cute. And all the bonus points and pink wafers because fghuofgwey I love it so much!!!

Thank you love <3333 Thank you so much!!

[talkingtothesky]

YOU'RE SO VERY WELCOME! I loved the prompt so much :D Anything that gives me an opportunity to write them as bamfs in love is very very enjoyable <3

[little_cello]

Omfg Sky that is so brilliant.

I love how first, time seems to be standing still for them with how bored they are (well, apart from Gene's glee over the binoculars XD), and then SUDDENLY THE SHOOTING, I MEAN WOW. I love that Gene's highest concern is to get Sam out alive and he drives even with his arm and leg shot, and even ADMITTING it's mostly luck that they get away....
SAM'S SHOCK OVER GENE'S INJURIES, HOW HE DOESN'T SMILE BACK AT GENE I JUST HDSJKHKAHDJAK <3333333333 And Gene giving him the flasks, that was just, just, hhnnnnggggggggggggg THE BEST.

And then the comfortttttt <33333333333 "When Sam walked into Gene's hospital room later that evening, their twin relieved grins could have powered the sun." PERFECTIONNNN <33333333 And Sam's comment about the shooting being like a playstation game oh my god XDDDDDD So many perfect things in this fic, I can't even list them all. But one thing I do have to say: DON'T TALK ABOUT ANAL IN HERE JUST ABOUT MADE ME LAUGH OUT LOUD just like Gene. ♥ And then the two of them hugging and Sam

[talkingtothesky]

Awwwww thank you for picking out so many lines! <3333 You're far too kind.

[rebelxxwaltz]

It's funny-- while reading the action scene I was thinking to myself "Bullet holes in the Cortina? Gene is gonna be realllll unhappy about this later on." Hahaha! So I'm glad you so effectively tied up what could have been left as a rather glaring loose end, at least from Gene's point of view. ;)

I agree with Cello that it was a great contrast between the boredom of stakeout and the sudden adrenaline and terror of the ensuing shootout. And it was great characterization, the way both Sam and Gene were injured and worried for each other but knew they still had a job to do. It couldn't have been easy for either of them, leaving the other/watching the other go, but protecting the innocent people and catching the baddies is important enough that they're able to briefly put their feelings aside.

And their reunion in the hospital at the end? Awwww! I love it when Gene is sort of gruffly grumpy-sweet. For him, "What time do you call this? simply translates as "I missed you." And the joke about 'anal'? XDDDDD

Really enjoyed this! <3333

[talkingtothesky]

It couldn't have been easy for either of them, leaving the other/watching the other go, but protecting the innocent people and catching the baddies is important enough that they're able to briefly put their feelings aside.

I'm so glad this came across! <3

"Bullet holes in the Cortina? Gene is gonna be realllll unhappy

Do you know when I was writing it I nearly described a lot of bullets clanging against the roof before i remembered it's a soft top and they'd be dead, so I had to pretend the guns could only hit the doors! The Cortina got away lightly!

Thanks for reading and leaving this lovely comment :)

[girlwtmousyhair]

So much fluuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuff! But what a great balance of action and angst to go with it, really beautifully done Sky.

Love Gene cheerfully hogging the binoculars, that made me laugh. Their reunion is lovely, too, with the comfortable banter before they get into actually showing how they feel... :D

[talkingtothesky]

*holds hands up* I am guilty of The Fluff, I admit it. XD

I'm glad Gene made you laugh! Thanks so much for reading and leaving such a nice comment ♥

[debl_ns]

Sky, I like how you move from the tedium of the stakeout to the gunplay, building the tension much like we'd see on tv. The action scene is so well-done and easy to visualize; I love how their feelings and concern for each other are so evident yet it doesn't deter them from doing their jobs. And the hospital scene is a nice continuation of those feelings while maintaining the integrity of the characters. So many great lines there!♥

[talkingtothesky]

Thank you very much for reading and letting me know :D ♥