Fic: Let Us Go Forward Together, Ray/Chris

[elfbert]

Title: Let Us Go Forward Together.
Author: Elfbert
Recipient: _afterism
Rating: NC-12
Word Count: 4850 words, ish. (And I thought I'd struggle to get to 1000!)
Notes/Warnings: Title from a very famous poster during the war. Prompt was ‘Ray/Chris, please? "I don't know any french, boss.”’ nebula99 did the fastest beta ever, so thank you to her and all remaining mistakes

Comments

[draycevixen]

You've got me reading Ray/Chris and liking it. Damn you! :D Thank you for being gentle with me -- I think it may be too soon for me for the Ray/Chris lovin' yet... *read peeking carefully between fingers.*

I really like the attention to detail in this story, your observation of the party, Ray's background, the bit with Chris and his mother really go together to paint the picture of how these people came to be. You don't see an awful lot of that in fan fiction in general. Thank you!

[elfbert]

I won't point you towards the comm. memories and my fic 'Control Switch' just yet then...XD But if you haven't, you should check out the mems for the sheer amount of quality fic for every taste. 'Tis fab.

Thank you for your fb - I enjoy detail very much, and I think my fics often dwell upon the mundanities of life that other people choose to leave out to get onto the action. I like dialogue and description and backstory and all that jazz.

[draycevixen]

I won't lie and tell you that I don't enjoy a good PWP but I'm a big believer in the details... actually, I like those in my PWP too *snerk*

If I read something and like it enough to finish it I always try to post a comment. People should know that their writing has been appreciated. I do in particular appreciate an author's shot at providing back story for a character. I think if I'm ever going to get over my "squeamishness" enough to deal with Ray/Chris love I will need to try to see Ray in this more sympathetic light, so thanks for that!

[nebula99]

I told you already that I really liked this, but I'll tell you again.

I really liked this.

And really - anytime!

[elfbert]

Thank you, hon! You were a star.

[alizarin_nyc]

Fantastic.

“An’ listen to me Dad snorin’ an’ help me Mum wash up, then get dragged to me Auntie’s an’ listen to ‘em all moan on at me about crime rates an’ how they could do a better job than we do an’ ‘ow we should still ‘ave the death penalty.” Chris shook his head. “Rather be ‘ere.”

A great look at Chris and that boredom we all feel on holidays after the meal is over! The last bit with Ray's describing the war is very powerful. And it creates a tender moment that wouldn't have been there otherwise.

Nicely done.

[elfbert]

Thank you very much!

I think people sometimes forget what Gene and Ray would have lived through. It's easy to think of them being similar in age to Sam and sort of forget that they have quite different history. And Ray's always seemed a very lonely character to me.

Thank you for commenting!

[elfbert]

Thank you honey! I thought it would be slashier, but somehow it moved slowly and that just felt right. Maybe there'll be a sequel XD

[dancesontrains]

This was very sweet, and I adore the details you've put in.