Title: WHAT IF? (A comment fic)
Written By : Marsabi
Rating: NC-17
Summary: What if Noah had not rejected Luke that day in the bar? What if Noah “forgives” him, and they get back together ? Many argue (in douche fandoms) that Reid never would’ve been with Luke then. Of course, Noah’s stingy heart didn’t forgive Luke in that famous scene.
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Second, akdjfkladjfdklsjfdklasfj!!!!!
Third, OMG I LOVED IT SO MUCH! Seriously, seriously, seriously good.
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Noah pumps Abigail for information about LA; he almost seems to flirt with her. When you confront him, Noah calls you dramatic.
Back home, Noah approaches sex like he is doing you a favor.
Both of these because they are so true that I can absolutely see them happening, but also how we were talking about showing vs telling? And both of these show so much. They show so, so, so much.
Actually, this entire thing is such a great example of showing and not telling.
Just love it like whoa, my friend. Good damn job.
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Also, I enjoyed the use of second person POV here. It worked really well!
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WOW. Just...WOW.
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I don't usually enjoy second person but it was perfect here!
Luke would have been miserable if he had gone back to Noah---ugh!!!
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