Introspection has its upsides. Lotsa creative writing.

[marrapessa]

Jak and Jyll went up the hill
To live happily ever after
Jyll pushed Jak down
And broke his crown
Then Jyll jumped headfirst after.

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[shadowgb]

A
B
C
C
B

Thad the weirdest format for a rhyming poem I have ever seen. didn't you have anything to rhyme with A?

[marrapessa]

Don't you have anything better to do than rip up my writing?

Jack and Jill went up a hill
To fetch a pail of water
Jack fell down
And broke his crown
And Jill came tumbling after

The original doesn't rhyme well either.

[shadowgb]

I wasn't ripping up your writing, otherwise I would have said it sucked. I was criticizing, and I didn't even mean it in a negative way. geeze.