The Real LJ Idol * Season 11 * Week 27

Jul 19, 2020 15:54

"Values are like fingerprints. Nobody’s are the same, but you leave ’em all over everything you do ( Read more... )

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encrefloue July 21 2020, 21:11:03 UTC
Your transformations always inspire awe. The layering of metaphor on metaphor (such as in the example of cognitive dissonance turned sonic dissonance turned carrion flies) was so smoothly executed that it's as adroit as a magician's sleight of hand, and the result is no less magical. I had not hoped for a conclusion so comforting, and now I marvel in how the structure of the poem has a transformation to parallel its message.

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marlawentmad July 25 2020, 16:24:38 UTC
Thank you for your effusive comment. I am really honored by your generous feedback.

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rayaso July 22 2020, 16:11:43 UTC
This was really wonderful! I especially liked the first large stanza, as well as "the notes harmonizing/into a crescendo of alignment." Your imagery was excellent as well.

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marlawentmad July 25 2020, 16:51:28 UTC
Thank you for reading and offering that lovely feedback.

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karmasoup July 23 2020, 04:25:15 UTC
My takeaway from this is, sometimes we have to let go of ideas we once thought belonged to us - as integrated as to be considered making up a part of who we thought we are, even - because we find as we try to move on in life while carrying them, they don't sit right in us or with us, and when we do, we come into a new kind of harmony with who we are without them. I'm sure I'm just attaching my own perspective here, but at least I like that thought this conjured.

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marlawentmad July 25 2020, 22:53:28 UTC
What I love about poetry, is that every reader will bring their own perspective to filter it through, so one poem can live many lives. I adore your interpretation. Thank you for sharing your insight.

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m_malcontent July 23 2020, 17:11:52 UTC
Very powerful, no words wasted as poetry is meant to be.

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marlawentmad July 25 2020, 22:54:09 UTC
I appreciate that lovely feedback. Editing down is a rewarding process for me.

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flipflop_diva July 23 2020, 20:13:26 UTC
I really love the first stanza. It's such a great image and it just sets the tone for the whole thing really, really well!

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marlawentmad July 25 2020, 22:54:43 UTC
I am really pleased to know that worked well for you. Thank you for the feedback.

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