Winter Haiku

[marius23]

Blizzardy whiteness,
a flash of light and a boom!
Wow! It's thundersnow!*

Shiny white crystals
become gray slush in the street.
New England winter.

Windy winter nights
ice hair as snow tingles skin.
Languishing in liquid warmth.

Tilting away from light
darkness reaches its peak then
Solus invictus!

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*Boston, 12/9/2005

Comments

[emeraldliz]

I thought haikus weren't supposed to have any punctuation?

#2- you can do better than "pretty"

#3- we'll work on the hot water

Love #4

[marius23]

Punctuation is irrelevant. I can imagine a haiku consisting solely of punctuation, a la Victor Borge. :-)

Better than "pretty" in two syllables? "Shiny" maybe? "Sparkly"?

I'm open to suggestion for "hot water". Maybe something more metaphorical?

Thank you!

[marius23]

Revised today.