Ooc: Concrit Post

[marionettetamer]

This where you tell me:

→ How my character is faring.
→ How the structure of my character is
→ What I am doing wrong.
→ What I can do to improve.
→ What I excel at
→ My weaknesses and stuff
→ Anything else you want to tell me about
→ Constructive criticism only, please don't flame me.

Thanks,

TAREI ♥

Comments

[just_like_nii]

I don't know your character's canon so I can't comment on that (I'm sure she's fine or she wouldn't have gotten in, though) but I wanted to mention that, well... in this post you misspelled "structure", and you seem to randomly capitalize words that don't need to be... Like in her profile you say "She could Use Basic Fonic Artes, and Powerful Strike Artes". I'm don't know whether "Fonic Artes" and "Strike Artes" should be capitalized, (or whether "Basic" and "Powerful" should), but "Use" definitely shouldn't.

So I'd just recommend proofreading a little more thoroughly, nothing major! ♥ Welcome to Daisychain!

[marionettetamer]

Ah, okay, well, I'll fix that, thanks for telling me
I've been playing Anise for a while, so It should be okay, but I faults too, so yeah I'm sure someone can tell me if I did something wrong about that
Thanks though.

[just_like_nii]

No problem! I hope I didn't come off as rude or anything.

Good luck!

[marionettetamer]

Alright thanks and no it didn't I'm alright with it.