Comments | manriicabaeju: [preview] for a voice that can't be heard

manriicabaeju

[preview] for a voice that can't be heard

Oct 20, 2010 20:35

Need some opinions, sorry. This is ShinraCelty, s-so. Yeah. ///;

( mysteries and moonbeams and Victorian dresses in the cargo hold. )

durarara, shinracelty, pairings, creative writing stuff, fanfiction, fandoms

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manriicabaeju October 22 2010, 03:19:36 UTC

You really don't! So I wanted to try and write one of my own but... hahah... ////;;

Th-thank you. I appreciate it. .///.

pyro_tehphoenix October 21 2010, 06:59:51 UTC

Aw, I thought this was just lovely! I thought Shinra was very incharacter actually. It was very sweet and a little sad, but in, um a good way? I liked it a lot <3

manriicabaeju October 22 2010, 03:20:24 UTC

Ahahah! Thank you! 8D I'm glad you thought he was!! <3 <3
That's about the feeling I was going for. :'D I'm so glad you caught it!
Th-thank you! ;w;

pyro_tehphoenix October 22 2010, 03:30:48 UTC

You're welcome <3

strawberrykaoru October 21 2010, 13:39:50 UTC

Imma let you finish but aww, Shinra/Celty! /squishes the fic It's very adorable, though it's more fragmented than to my liking? Well everyone has different writing styles, so I still, of course, liked how you present Shinra's love for Celty (and Celty was so cute at the end!).

You fail at life. orz

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manriicabaeju October 22 2010, 03:21:23 UTC

>w< /////;;
I-I was practicing with the fragments... I'm not really used to it, either, but it's kind of fun when you get into it. ;w;
Th-thank you! <3 Ahahah.

calavasas October 21 2010, 20:11:40 UTC

D'aww
I think this is good Tsuna! ^^
You should finish it if you really want to. I like it. :D

manriicabaeju October 22 2010, 03:18:52 UTC

A-awww, thanks Jubi. ;w; I appreciate it.
I was so uncertain about this piece, but I think I'll find time to finish it soon. Thank youuuu. <3

darkenedsakura October 22 2010, 18:10:42 UTC

The parentheses-italics style! You're using it! 8D ...I think you've been reading too much of my fics, among other things, so maybe it'd be better to stop doing that. 8D

I don't really care about Shinra/Celty, but this was interesting. A few grammar/subject/clause things, but otherwise, looks good. You should keep at it. I wish I could write Durarara fic, but I honestly...can't think of anything to write about. Maybe Kasuka/Ruri - okay, stop riiiiiiiiight there.

manriicabaeju October 23 2010, 17:22:16 UTC

AHHH WHY DID YOU READ THIS I DIDN'T THINK YOU WOULD. ///// OTL
I think it's already become a solid part of my style for me to stop, h-hahah... I usually don't ever do it to this extent though, so it's new even for me. But it's kind of interesting to get it just flow like this. >//<

Th-thanks... ////;; I didn't think I'd ever be able to ShinraCelty without making it fluff, which I... don't really like writing. -is too depressing for that- So I'm glad I managed to make it more serious and... yeah. OTL;;
I'll try and go through and correct everything when I'm not exhausted/half-asleep/sick. >x<
I'm sure that you'll be hit with inspiration one day. o: (nononoiwanttohearaboutit. 8D )