Fic (Due South): Brilliant (NC-17)

[mandysbitch]

Brilliant
Due South (Fraser/ Kowalski, NC-17)
Author's Notes: Written for the bordellinos 48 Hour Fic Challenge. Prompt from cappuccinogirl and Lori McKenna

Comments

[buddleia]

I don't know why - considering that this leaves everything hanging - but this is a very satisfying story. Possibly because I can absolutely, completely see Ray behaving this way.

[mandysbitch]

this is a very satisfying story

Well, that's good to hear. I don't think I'm a good flashfic writer - I need time to think a story through and do lots (and lots!) of edits. This is a bit too rough for me. Although, I suppose the flipside is that if I'd given it too much thought I would never have posted anything at all so maybe that's the positive outcome - such as it is.

Anyway, thanks so much for giving it a read. I'm very grateful.

[atrata]

Nghhhhhhh want more. I like the atmosphere of this, that dreary gray nothingness surrounding him, and for as much as I usually hate the cutesy jokes about Mounties always getting their man, I love the flip side of it, that it means he's going to hunt him the fuck down. In my head, Ray keeps moving and building it up in his head and he gets more and more freaked out, and when Fraser finds him, it is EPIC. Possibly epically hot, but maybe also just an epic trainwreck. Boys. <333

[mandysbitch]

I wrote the ending on this thing first. To me, that's an ending. Is that where I go wrong in the first place? I don't know.

I guess I just like big old messy love stories.

I usually hate the cutesy jokes about Mounties always getting their manThe reference to "hunting you to the ends of the earth" is a reference to a phrase used in the show a lot (in the pilot most memorably) and not just with reference to Mounties but to cops in general (I think they say, "you shoot a cop and they'll hunt you forever" or something like that) so I didn't really connect that with the "always get your man" thing. Maybe because I didn't really get the "always get your man" thing when that came up. I wasn't sure what to make of it. I didn't realise it was supposed to be the same thing. Was it

[atrata]

Hmmm! Well, I don't think it's exactly the same thing, and I think you're right that they don't really use them together or interchangeably on the show, but I feel like hunting someone to the ends of the earth is the logical extension of always getting their man. Like, how else would they do it? So it makes sense to me, but I'd never really thought about it, and I like it a lot.

And I hope you didn't interpret "want more" as "I hated the end"! I don't like things wrapped up in a neat little bow, and I found this ending very satisfying, actually. I pretty much always want to know what happens next -- which I suspect is WHY I don't like things wrapped up for me. Then... nothing happens next. There's nothing for me to engage with. Sad.

[mandysbitch]

I feel like hunting someone to the ends of the earth is the logical extension of always getting their man. Like, how else would they do it?

True. But hunting him to the ends of the Earth sounds so much more demented, you know? I mean, always getting your man sounds kind of stand-up-straight perfect, whereas hunting someone to the ends of the earth gives the saying a nasty edge. Or something. I mean, who does that? It's pathological. So maybe they (the show) just phrased it that was because it sounded better, more twisted. They mentioned it a few times - I never could figure out what it was supposed to mean. Canadians!

I hope you didn't interpret "want more" as "I hated the end"! I don't like things wrapped up in a neat little bow, and I found this ending very satisfying, actually.

Ah, no - I was just commenting on your comments about the ending. Mostly I was rambling.

[dodificus]

“Cross a Mountie,” Ray says. “And he’ll hunt you to the ends of the Earth.”

Oh. A *perfect* ending.

[mandysbitch]

I'm glad you liked the ending. For at least the first half of the 48 hours the ending was all I had! God, that 48 hour thing was stressful!

Thank for reading and commenting on my rush-job (nut-job!) fic. I appreciate it.

[gatefiction]

I can't believe you got this whole thing out in 48 hours. I'm going to be a wreck when it's my turn. Okay, I thought this story was fucking hilarious. I've always seen that last ep. as epic and tragic and that they probably died together in the snow (kissing or not) but now I'm just going to think of these two repressed homosexuals going all Brokeback and then Ray doing a run.

And the best line was Frasier being worried the railing would mess up the dogs cuz, YES.

[mandysbitch]

I can't believe I got that out in 48 hours - okay, I didn't really. I took a bit longer and my 48 hours went past and I had to prompt intl_princess before I was finished. It was all very stressful.

And I think the end product was very obviously rushed. But there it is I suppose.

ve always seen that last ep. as epic and tragic and that they probably died together in the snow

No, no, no! They got married in some traditional Inuit ceremony and had lots of wild butt-sex. The end.

And we should chat on the weekend. Are you free?

[gatefiction]

not this weekend - i'm working and my mother is coming to stay. all i need is to get hit with the bordy thing too, gaaah. how about next weekend?

it's been great fun to see so many bordy stories - like it's 2002 or something!!!!

[mandysbitch]

all i need is to get hit with the bordy thing too

Woohoo! Won't that be fun?

it's been great fun to see so many bordy stories - like it's 2002 or something!

I know! It's awesome. I would schedule this for next month too - but I hated it so maybe not.

[pene]

god, you did an adventure story in 48(+) hours. Amazing. It feels complete too. I love the para that starts "it was somewhere in the night..." okay so I know nothing about these people except: mountie/not mountie. but it's hot and talky and atmospheric and sort of happy in a scary way.

[mandysbitch]

and sort of happy in a scary way.

Yeah, I was sort of going for that, it's fucked up but in a good way vibe. So that's nice.

Thanks for reading and putting up with the boy bits. :)