Fiction

[mancerbear]

Well guys, this is it.  The last section of Chapter 3.  Hopefully it was enjoy, and I'd love to hear more from those that are reading it. Feedback is always welcome, as is conjecture, suggestions, and creaive critisizm... don't be afraid to post, please.

Comments

[bmarch]

Very good pacing, dialogue that definitely "sounds" real and fits with the style of BBC sci-fi writing (if that makes sense, sorry). You do have some run-on sentences that could be broken down into shorter sentences to make the flow smoother, but that's a stylistic matter, not one og content. All in all, this's a really good start! I remember years ago seeing a few episodes on cable, can't remember what channel. An interesting premise, slightly creepy actually. The next stage in human evolution, pledged to saving the planet and humanity whether the rest of "normal" humanity wants to be saved. Anyway, keep working on it. I'd like to see what happens next.