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Mal/River Prompt 18 - Night Visitors

Jul 08, 2006 08:56

Title: Night Visitors
Author: Ana Sedai
Rating: PG
Character(s): Mal, River
Prompt: 062 - Sound
Word Count: 1,115
A/N: 18/100 for Mal/River Joss100. This is longer than 1,000 words, but I couldn’t bring myself to cut any more than I already did. I hope the Prompt Gods will forgive me.

Summary: River’s dragons finally stop roaring.

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Comments 13

gwenfrewi72 July 8 2006, 18:08:59 UTC

*sits humming contentedly in computer chair, trying desperate to figure out the right words to express ones feelings of contentment and joy at the fic just read*

Another wonderful job. Well done.

*bows at feet in abject adoration*

ana_sedai July 9 2006, 03:53:05 UTC

Thanks a bunch. :) This turned out slightly more schmaltzy than I'd originally intended, but it came out right so I'm happy with it. Beware angst on the horizon, however.

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ana_sedai July 9 2006, 03:55:47 UTC

Gracias. Ah yes, darkness and UST, two of my most favorite things. Don't be too surprised if they continue to make a lot of appearances... (hint hint)

And an equation. Coolness! I'm math oriented, so equations help keep me on track a bit. Usually. ;)

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ana_sedai July 12 2006, 21:05:42 UTC

I art math oriented due to a degree in physics with a minor in math. Yep, yours truly was determined to become completely flaming cuckoo.

No creative writing, more's the pity. Probably would have done me some good.

ninamazing July 8 2006, 21:26:29 UTC

SO GOOD LOVE. SO MANY GOOD LINES. OMGGGG LOVE. :DDDD

"'fore your brother gets it into his head that you ain't in it" -- AHAHAHA SO GOOD.

And this whole bit:

She nodded again and shifted so her head nestled in the crook of his shoulder. “You’re an adequate pillow.”

He chuckled at that, then yawned. “Thanks, I think. Sleep tight, darlin’. Sure hope those dragons a’ yours are gone by morning.”

The last thing he heard before drifting back off was a soft, “They will be.”

GENIUS, GENIUS!

Mmm, dragons.

VERY well done. This could be my favorite yet. You just keep writing, or I shall promptly riot. :D

ana_sedai July 9 2006, 04:03:16 UTC

Thank you! I just love writing dialogue for these things. It flows so naturally, it's almost scary. It's scary because I'm never quite sure if I'm being true to the characters or not. Someone else's voice shouldn't be this easy to hear. They lock people up in very tight white jackets with long sleeves for that sort of thing, you know. ;)

Ah yes, the dragon metaphor. I didn't want to get rid of the voices thing too soon. I hope I didn't. I've still got a considerable way to go, with a considerable amount of story to get through. Hope it didn't seem too sudden.

And don't worry. Please don't riot! I'm still writing. I've got a plan for the next long bunch, so we'll see how that goes. It's easier plotting things out beforehand. That way you don't spend most of your writing time scanning back through old stories to make sure you're not contradicting yourself or something.

By the way, this may be my favorite so far as well.

jazzfic July 9 2006, 00:06:26 UTC

*sighs*

I think I told you this one was my favourite when I did the beta? Because it SO is. *hugs*

ana_sedai July 9 2006, 04:05:02 UTC

Oh yes, you told me that, and made me very happy when you did. :)

I'll have the next one to you within the next two days. I've just got to railroad myself through a slight case of "what-now-itis". ;)

faythbrady July 12 2006, 16:49:47 UTC

Beautiful. I loved the image of Big Bad Captain chasing away the dragons and the way he was so attuned to her emotions.
That last line holds so much promise, can't wait for more.

ana_sedai July 12 2006, 21:01:45 UTC

You know what they say: "The course of true love never did run smooth..." ;)

Thanks for reading. :)