Comments | mal_river: FIC: Cracks [1/1, Mal/River]

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FIC: Cracks [1/1, Mal/River]

Oct 29, 2005 20:04

Title: Cracks
Rating: PG-13
Author: Cella
Summary: Cracks in River’s life, they all need glue to put them back together.
Warning: Spoilers for Serenity.
Pairing: Mal/River
Fandom: Firefly
A/N: Like I said. I’m still too new to this. If you chose to judge, judge wisely. Or I’ll sick my imaginary friend, Jack on you.

( stages of a cracked life )

author: shortitude, title: c

Comments 21

evilfirepixie8 October 29 2005, 19:12:23 UTC

Oh, this is lovely. I would have never know you are new to this if you hadn't disclaimed it to us. I love the Mal/River interaction, the way you discribed River's thoughts during the Reaver fight (particularly the rhyme), and this- "They’ve grown accustomed to this way of sitting. River is always on his left, in missions, at dinner, and while piloting Serenity." Wonderful work.

shortitude October 29 2005, 20:26:22 UTC

I'm in a state of perpetual...::bounce,bounce,squeee:: You know?

I've barely seen more than a few episodes of Firefly, though I loved them. And Serenity rocks my world, so yes. That, plus all the fireflyvideos I saw, and voila, I hereby proclaim myself worthy of writing Firefly. And you just told me it's good, so...::fills up with joy:: Thank you so much!

madjm October 30 2005, 06:17:35 UTC

This is so very River. It makes you feel for her, and at the same time makes you feel that she's going to be OK. She's got Serenity and her family. And Mal. I thought the use of the articles was a nice touch. I'm really looking forward to reading more of your stuff, especially if it's Mal/River.

I did notice a few typos and such. You might want to think about getting a beta reader to look stuff over first. It always helps me lots to have someone else proof my stuff. :)

shortitude October 30 2005, 13:51:37 UTC

Yeah, it's awful when you discover the typos after you've already posted. ::headdesl::

BUT, anyway. OMG, you're commenting on my fics! And you like them! Squee! Is this how one feels when someone one admires likes their work? I like it. I'm so glad to be able to get River to cooperate.

randomsignal October 30 2005, 09:54:01 UTC

Keep writing, Cella!
This is rare stuff. Real strong vibe--just what it would be like inside River's head.
Gotta say, your ending doesn't fit my impression of Mal--he's a major prude in the series--but that's not criticism, just a different point of view.

shortitude October 30 2005, 13:49:40 UTC

He is kinda prudeish, isn't he? ::smirk:: I'll write more, don't worry!

faith_less_one October 30 2005, 20:56:16 UTC

This filled me with a fatal case of the warm fuzzies. Beautifully done, sweetheart. It's stories like this that keep the Firefly withdrawal symptoms pleasantly absent.

Thank you.

shortitude October 30 2005, 20:57:10 UTC

I'm glad you liked. :D

cleversimon October 31 2005, 06:47:47 UTC

Yeah, I'm sure the end is very sweet and everything, but I'm still hung up on Look, Simon. I made a rhyme.

I don't know that I've ever read such a chilling passage in a Firefly fic. As in ever. As in, next time I watch the BDM, that's going to be running through my head, and I'm going to goosebump myself to death.

shortitude October 31 2005, 16:24:32 UTC

*evil cackle* Good. It was meant to chill.