Fic: Unraveled

[opalish]

Title: Unraveled
Author: opalish
Rating: T
Characters: Mal, River, ensemble
Summary: Love is just another madness that afflicts River Tam.
Notes: Set after the movie. My first Firefly fic, so please let me know how I did.

Comments

[aikakone]

A VERY well-done first fic. :D No criticism, just "I like it!"

[opalish]

Thanks, and I'm very glad you liked it!

[jazzfic]

Just beautiful, fantastic River voice. I hope to see more from you :)

[opalish]

Getting River right was probably what I was most worried about. She's so...well, intangible, in some ways.

I hope to write more - all depends upon whether college decides to kill me or not. Freshman year = ultimate evil.

Thanks for the feedback!

[thefalloficarus]

I really liked this! It was very well done! I think you did a great job with both river and mal!

[opalish]

Thanks!

[ninamazing]

Wow - you are AWESOME. I am so excited to actually read good new fic.

You've really gotten River here, so you succeeded! What was also great is how you talk about the other members of the crew, too (ZOE IS PREGNANT! SHE SO IS!) -- and this River voice comes off as really melodic, and flowing. It's different because in most other places she's disjointed, but this works for her here too.

I really like the thought that River loves (and hates) everyone, because it's a teenage feeling and at the same time a big!world feeling, and I think she has them both. That's really her to me.

I need to go to bed now, but as a sophomore in college (I read in another comment that you're a freshman), I say, TAKE ADVANTAGE OF THE TIME WHILE YOU HAVE IT. And write for us. :D

(But then the nerd part of me advises you not to jeopardize your academics. :P )

You're awesome. I really hope you keep writing!

[opalish]

*blushes*

Thanks so much! I honestly have never written a character more intimidating than River, so it's really good to know I didn't mangle her.

ZOE MUST BE PREGNANT. So there.

Already posted another fic to after_serenity and ff_fanfic (or whatever those communities are called) because writing Firefly fanfic is apparently addictive. (Me, blatantly pimping my own fic? Nah.)

Thanks again for the review!

[thegreenquill]

writing Firefly fanfic is apparently addictive.

It's completely addicting, and I'm glad you've caught it. I can't wait for more.

I love River's rambling thought process, how she takes thoughts and conclusions and weaves them all together trying to understand the idea as a whole. It's a great River voice.

[opalish]

There should be a general health warning on Firefly and Serenity. Warning: viewing the enclosed will induce obsessive behavior and rage against FOX.

Erm.

Thanks for the feedback!

[hereswith]

You did very well :-) This is lovely, and I like how you write River.

[opalish]

Thanks!