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Mal/River Prompt 19 - Stability

Jul 27, 2006 17:26

Title: Stability
Author: Ana Sedai
Rating: PG
Character(s): BDC (Big Damn Crew) (again)
Prompt: 020 - Still
Word Count: 967
A/N: 19/100 for Mal/River Joss100. I am so sorry that I am taking so long to post these! This is what happens when one gets involved with more than one dearly-departed sci-fi series. Focus gets split. I'll try to do better for ( Read more... )

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gwenfrewi72 July 27 2006, 22:59:05 UTC

I like this one. It makes perfect sense of the dynamic between M/R. Another beautiful job.

ana_sedai July 29 2006, 13:29:21 UTC

Thanks! That dynamic is harder to get right sometimes than it is at others. Good to know this was one of the others. :)

raincitygirl July 28 2006, 01:12:51 UTC

So cute. And I love the bustling and busy-ness you evoke from the whole crew.

ana_sedai July 29 2006, 13:30:30 UTC

Yeah, they're a fun bunch to write. When they're all together, the scene just sort of writes itself. Now *that's* chemistry!

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ana_sedai July 29 2006, 13:35:26 UTC

Hey, I missed you too. Then you had to go and post that absolutely heart-breakingly haunting death!fic. Now I'm all heartsick. I love it! ;)

The next installment is coming pretty soon. Things are going to start getting a bit dicey...

One of the reasons I love River's character so much is that she is Truth personified. She can't lie to herself, and she knows when others try to as well. Problem is, *they* don't always know when they're lying to themselves.

ninamazing July 28 2006, 06:06:52 UTC

Awww. Mal, you douche. Get a move on already. :P

The "busyness" pun was fantastic. It's very River. That whole beginning was very nicely done --

“It’s a factory, Jayne. It’s a factory filled with lots of things that go boom. One grenade of yours gets loose, and we’re gonna be among those things.”

SO Mal. Oh my God, SO Mal. <3333333 your Firefly dialogue, dearie.

Plus, this passage was just beautiful:

She was well aware of how pathetic that need might seem to others. Depending on someone else so entirely, wanting them to depend on you, was not something that was considered desirable, or even healthy. But River had not had the luxury of self-deception for many years. She was what she was, and she knew what she knew.

This piece in particular really resonated with me ... mostly because I too am having a bit of trouble being stable right now, and ... HEY, I too have a seesaw boyfriend.

Anyway. Nicely done. Gorgeous. Let's hope sweet cuddling and hot sex is in our future. :D

ana_sedai July 29 2006, 13:43:11 UTC

Oh, Mal will move alright, just not quite how he should...

Glad I got the dialogue right. I love writing it, so why do I feel this constant compulsion to do internal pieces so much? Hmph.

As for stability and see-saw boyfriends, well, you have my ardent sympathies. Hope things work out okay.

RE: sweet cuddling and hot sex. Have patience. They'll get there...eventually. ;)

modernmuse July 29 2006, 00:07:52 UTC

She watched the patterns of movement and voices, saw how, completely unconsciously, Mal pulled everyone into orbit around him.

So very true. Nicely done. Love the interaction between the crew.

ana_sedai July 29 2006, 13:44:41 UTC

Thank you. I love their interaction as well. Scenes like this, I can practically see happening as I write them.