Double Drabble: Enough

[magickmoons]

Title: Enough
Word Count: 200
Rating: Teen and Up
Original/Fandom: Stargate: SG-1
Characters/Pairings: Reader's Choice
Warnings:
Summary: The universe is often strangely indifferent to your desires.
Notes: Written for a writerverse challenge where the last line must be: In that moment, it's enough.

Comments

[mimithemuse]

I think the ending might make a tiny bit more sense if the condition of the narrator's fallen comrade is revealed. Otherwise, I think it's a very well written piece that appealls to people outside of the fandom as well as fans. Good job!

[magickmoons]

Thanks for the feedback. I'll keep that in mind.

I'm glad you enjoyed it.

[ami_ven]

Very nice! And I kind of like that there's no names, so we don't really know who's narrating and who's injured...

[magickmoons]

Thanks! I didn't originally intend for this to be reader's choice, or even 2nd person. It just kind of wrote itself that way...

[unwritten_muse]

I really like how the tension builds in this. You get a clear sense of the jeopardy here, of not only the injury to one of the team members but the distress from the others. You show a very poignant comparison between what they normally enjoy after a good mission and the cold and painful reality they're forced to deal with right now. It's stark and very effective.

[magickmoons]

Thank you!