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magickmoons

Ficlet: Leaving (Firefly)

Apr 06, 2012 08:40

Title: Leaving
Word Count: 257
Rating: G
Original/Fandom: Firefly
Characters/Pairings: Inara(/Mal)
Warnings (Non-Con/Dub-Con/RPF etc): none
Summary: Inara is leaving Serenity
Notes: Written for a challenge at writerverse. Prompt is 'moving day.'

( Leaving )

post-series, fic:firefly, pairing: ust, comm: writerverse, char: inara serra, cat: het, rating: general audiences, pairing: inara/mal

Comments 14

dreximgirl April 6 2012, 15:38:16 UTC

This was really good; I think you really captured Inara well. It was also very like Mal to think of some lame excuse not to attend her farewell party, poor boy just cannot admit his feelings. I love how you have kept her strength by her refusing to turn around, at the end of the day they are both as stubborn as each other.

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magickmoons April 6 2012, 20:36:52 UTC

Thank you :) I'm glad the stubbornness from both sides came through in this one - the two of them are quite a pair!

meridian_rose April 6 2012, 17:39:51 UTC

This is wonderful and everyone mentioned is in character. I like the interpretation of the prompt. I'm also impressed that Mal is never mentioned by name, just as him , and how he is conspicuous by his absence. He probably is watching, of course, but that's just Mal/Inara all over.

magickmoons April 6 2012, 20:44:59 UTC

Thank you :) It seemed right that, at this point, she wouldn't use his name, even in her own mind. And yes, I think he's watching too!

nymaeria April 7 2012, 02:02:34 UTC

aww... poor inara. but she's so tough, she'll never let it show...

magickmoons April 7 2012, 02:21:08 UTC

Yeah, and would it kill one of them to actually admit to their feelings?! Laf.

riverotter1951 April 7 2012, 23:49:59 UTC

This is so poignant as Inara prepares to leave Serenity. She knows that her decision has caused a rift between Mal and her. Two proud stubborn people with neither one willing to take the first step toward a relationship or risk heartbreak instead of being honest.

Will they ever meet again? Will Inara keep in touch with someone on Serenity?

magickmoons April 8 2012, 12:47:42 UTC

The two of them are a pair, aren't they?

Thanks for the feedback :)

turnerwolf April 8 2012, 00:52:33 UTC

Inara's character is spot on and so is Mal's. I could see him avoiding the party and not offering a goodbye. I can see Inara trying to convince herself that the sensation of Mal watching her as she left was not real and picturing Mal situated somewhere and staring at her as she left. So them... Wonderfully written, thanks for sharing :)

magickmoons April 8 2012, 12:53:10 UTC

Thank you!