Title: Intemperance (Part Two)
Author:
madoldmrsfiggSummary: “Then don’t you think, a small voice inside Hermione’s head piped up, that Ron would want that side of you, too?”
Rating: NC-17
Feedback: Very much appreciated. Either comment or at weasleyisourking @ hotmail.com
Notes: Written for
lysrouge in the
Second Ron Fic A Thon. She requested: Ron/Hermione. 1. D/s
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And no, I don't reckon that's yucky, for the record. ;)
I know... summer, HBP... *stares miserably out at British weather*
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Now, a helpful piece of concrit: You change verb tenses quite often (from past to present and back) so that it can be a bit distracting and disorienting at times. Other than that, perfect!
Cathy
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And I really appreciate the concrit. As it was for a challenge deadline, I only had the first half betaed, and I was struggling, I admit, with the verb tenses. I worried about that... so thanks, it's really helpful to know where I went wrong. :) Anything in particular for me to correct?
And thanks again. :D
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Fuck, she's a lucky girl!
Ron stumbles forward more, and dropped to his knees in front of her, his eyes raking all over her body
*swallows*
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Thanks! Means a lot, coming from the Queen of Smut, such as yourself...
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and damn hot too ;)
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Awesome
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Thanks for reviewing.
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