It looks like you're only talking PoU at this point, but I'd go on record as saying if you are in a refining mode my request would be no dialing back on the intensity in STNE14.
Best chapter ever.
For PoU, though, I'd say that more is, well, more. You've hit such a high-quality stride in the massive HWTF chapters, it'd be excellent to have PoU chapters rewritten on that scale. It's just me asking for more, I know, but I bet if offered the choice many would agree. :-)
Harry/HaroldlordofwrathNovember 23 2005, 19:40:56 UTC
I've been following PoU for a while, now. The only thing (and this is off the top of my head) that has ever really irked me is that at some points throughout the story you mention that Harry's full/real name is Harry, and at other points is Harold.
I may be wrong, but I seem to remember a post you made on the YGroup some time ago that you're sticking with Harry as his name.
I think rewriting PoU is an excellent idea, but at the same time I'd really love for the original version to be up somewhere also. Just for nostalgic purposes. :D
Oh and also...I think everyone's mentioned most of the awkward parts I can think of, but one scene that always annoyed me was when they were going to the Gala and Harry flies them. It was a little too superman-esque for me. Oh and the battle between Harry/Allegra/DEs...not the swordfight, the swordfight was pretty cool but I think there was something there that just niggled me...didn't his eyes glow red or something? I'll just have to go back and read it.
The few things that bothered me have already been mentioned, but I did think that the whole "Tamhtab" thing was a little too obvious, maybe because it's easy to decipher when written, probably not so much when it's uttered by a guy with pudding for brains.
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And I like the personality you gave Cho. Most people don't even bother with one. Book 5 even backs up her resentments a bit.
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Best chapter ever.
For PoU, though, I'd say that more is, well, more. You've hit such a high-quality stride in the massive HWTF chapters, it'd be excellent to have PoU chapters rewritten on that scale. It's just me asking for more, I know, but I bet if offered the choice many would agree. :-)
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I may be wrong, but I seem to remember a post you made on the YGroup some time ago that you're sticking with Harry as his name.
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Oh and also...I think everyone's mentioned most of the awkward parts I can think of, but one scene that always annoyed me was when they were going to the Gala and Harry flies them. It was a little too superman-esque for me. Oh and the battle between Harry/Allegra/DEs...not the swordfight, the swordfight was pretty cool but I think there was something there that just niggled me...didn't his eyes glow red or something? I'll just have to go back and read it.
Aww, now I want to go back and read PoU.
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Oh, regular pudding works too. *shrugs*
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