BLEACH [12 tortures] It just wouldn't go away
Title: Memories of the Dead
Torture: The Rack - July 8th
Author: Machinatio
Word count: 304
Warnings: Details from the start till Soul Society arc.
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Ah, the time when they were facing each other on Sōkyoku Hill.
Her expression projected fear in the face of her impending death, her movements sealed by the cross, her skin and soul burned away in the ( Read more... )
Torture: The Rack - July 8th
Author: Machinatio
Word count: 304
Warnings: Details from the start till Soul Society arc.
.
Ah, the time when they were facing each other on Sōkyoku Hill.
Her expression projected fear in the face of her impending death, her movements sealed by the cross, her skin and soul burned away in the ( Read more... )
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this was good. I liked it. :D
the last paragraph was a tearjerker.
I have one suggestion though. I think you should make a sort of break between each memory.
e.g.
The incident that allowed him to gain his shinigami powers.
Her eyes sparkled with pride, his flashed with gratefulness, even as the sharp blade was driven right through his heart.
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The battle when he first laid eyes on her.
Her skills appeared completely flawless, effective in every wound she cut, beautiful in every explosion she caused.
I was kind of confused in the beginning of how the flow was supposed to go, but I understood after reading a few.
Nice job diverting away from the evil!Rukia. Though, I must say. Your evil!Rukia is lovable. :D
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Took your suggetion in consideration. Though I separated the memories with only a dot. =) Hope its easier to understand now.
Look out for at least one more evilRukia fic! xD After looking through the future tortures, I should have some fun with attempts-at-angst fic, since some of my evilRukia ones can already double up as the future tortures as well =X
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