LJI Week 6: "Let's take a walk."

[mac_arthur_park]

i only took one pait of shoes

I never pack that light.

Pink ballet flats

It was supposed to be a long weekend,  Instead, it was my things under a leaky carport.

"I read your diary.  You're with him now.  You can never come back."

My shoes fill with rain.

This is the end.  And the beginning,

And I keep walking.

Comments

[seaivy]

even better!

[mac_arthur_park]

Thank you!

[adoptedwriter]

So much conveyed in a short time. So much feeling. Nicely done!

[mac_arthur_park]

Thank you!

[rayaso]

You packed so much into this, especially the end.

[mac_arthur_park]

Thank you. It was tough to write.

[static_abyss]

I really like your beginning. The whole was very impactful, but the beginning went like a song in my head.

[kittenboo]

Since I don’t really know you, I’m not sure if this is fiction or non or something in between, but it really conveys the realness of the situation. I could both picture it and feel it, very well done.