Just a tip, You're what I need.

[m_say_whaat]

Comments

[reflectedintv]

Hey bubs, you have a few small mistakes.

He gets up, ruffles my hair, and tells me he will be right back.

You switched POV there

He is asking your name. Brendon is what you're trying to say to him, but the shock is still too overpowering.

Why would he say his name was Brendon if he's Ryan, unless I'm misreading it and he's calling out for Brendon.

Im hooked bbe, more soon?
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[m_say_whaat]

Noo you are right. I'm the idiot that didn't catch it. I go over my things way to fast.

But thank you for pointing it out. I'll go and fix it.

Thank you for reviewing and more soon. I already have 7 chapters done for this.