Introduction. TORTALL.

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Comments

[sylvia_rachel]

Very nice. I like the use of the second person -- not everybody can carry that off.

I had to read the beginning twice before I figured out whose mother we were talking about. Sneaky!

[m_fics]

I steer away from second person, generally, but I think it was a good move for this bit.

Good! I wanted it to be a little ambiguous.

[ironyandwine]

I had to read this twice to figure it out, but I liked it. ^_^ The use of second person was interesting, too--it certainly caught my attention.

[m_fics]

I wanted it to be a little ambiguous, but not in a bad way. I didn't mean for it to be confusing. My apologies! But I'm glad you liked it in the end. Because that was also what I wanted. :D

[wottie]

I had to read that twice, but I think that only added to the awesomeness of this fic. Well done, and thanks for posting!

[m_fics]

It was a good challenge! Thanks. :)

[lea_hazel]

I kept trying to figure out who it was, but it didn't fit Aly, and Alanna was the only mother I could think of. Once I reached the end, though, it made perfect sense. :)

[m_fics]

Please, like I would ever write a fic about Aly where she didn't meet a slow and painful death. :p

Thanks!

[cesy]

Very clever. I, too, had to read it twice, but it only makes it more brilliant, that you don't figure out the first line until you reach the end.

[m_fics]

I'm glad you liked it. :)