LJI Exhibit B: Week 11 - Across the Fence

[m1ss1ngcupcake]

The fence stood in the middle of a field, its chain-links unbroken along its length, though parts had rusted after years of abuse from the weather. Some of its posts were crooked, some bent, but they, too, remained intact. It stretched, on and on, into the forests which stood on both ends of it

Comments

[roina_arwen]

Makes me wonder who is controlling the fence, or if it is only self-activated when someone gets to a particular height on it.

Obviously, folks can see what is on the other side of the fence - at least to a certain extent, seeing as it is chain-link - but it makes one wonder if Annie and her folks are being kept in or kept out!

[theun4givables]

I'm thinking more the latter, because who would know? There aren't any buildings nearby, etc.

I'm trying to figure that out, too! I think they're being kept in. But who knows? I don't think anyone's ever mapped the length of the fence, before. That would certainly answer the question.

[halfshellvenus]

Oh, Annie... Sometimes you're challenging self-imprisonment and the status quo, and sometimes you're perpetuating Darwinism. If only there were a way to know which, before it was too late.

[theun4givables]

Seriously. =/ Poor girl! Who knows? Maybe she'll inspire people to examine the fence more?

[witches]

So well written and such a heart breaking ending!

[theun4givables]

Thank you. :)

[cheshire23]

Yes, definitely a free-writing exercise gone right.

It reminded me of the electric fence in Catching Fire, except this one is actually on and deadly.

[theun4givables]

:)

I am going to happily assume this is a good thing.

[redqueenofevil]

I really like how you address death in this piece. I'm sad that Annie had to die in the process. Stupid fences.

[theun4givables]

Thank you. :)

I am, too. Stupid fences, indeed.

[favoritebean]

By chance, have you ever read anything by Connie Willis? She has a book that addresses a lot of death experiences. It sort of cultivated an interest in how writers describe death. The book in question is called "Passage." It's not my favorite book of hers, but it was kind of interesting.

[theun4givables]

I have not, actually. I will likely look into that book, though. Describing death (especially the POV character's) is kind of hard, so I'm just glad I did this well, here. :)