I just wanna thank my flist over at theun4givables for their feedback on this. You guys are awesome. :)"Thanks for inviting me out tonight, Jazz. I really needed to get away from everything
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Thank you. :) He's older in this version, and definitely a little more...aware of how he is and what he wants and what he likes. Which happen to include Savin. ;)
I know you do. xD I'm kinda hoping that with everyone being older things will er, even out a bit. :)
The tags are me being silly, but I think Jazz wants to change it. Because uh -- Savin knew what he was doing, but there was nothing soft or tender about it. >>;
And yes, definitely poor Mari. Savin's at least not as big of an asshole as he could have been, because he does tell her what happened right away (it's the final straw of sorts for her). Jazz and Savin don't end up together for a while after that, though. Jazz meets...someone else, lol.
Yeah, Sarah had Devin beta read this for me (seriously, her first comment was "This needs to be sexier." I was like, whuh? And then we figured out wtf Devin meant together lol), and I agree that it feels way better this way. They're definitely more themselves in this version, even if I didn't change/add all that much.
It's really unusual to see Jazz in this position-- he's usually the one feeling more coerced, in a variety of ways.
I guess it's the evolution of a relationship and of the people in it. At the beginning, Savin is a quieter character and Jazz more assertive, and by the later parts of the series Jazz has been emotionally betrayed many times over (including by Savin) and Savin has been too much swayed by what it's like to have power (because even if he doesn't want it for its own sake, having it still changes you).
The fact that they do change, partly in relation to each other, in a way that is a shift rather than an aboutface is very true to human nature.
Yeah, this was a little weird for me, too, as I wrote it. The changes in his personality from how I'm altering the world itself and where their story takes place in their world's timeline were really marked, for me. I was like huh. This is what he's like when his life started out a little less roughly.
Definitely. In Idol I focused a lot on when their relationship was falling apart, which meant focusing a lot on the third book. Since this is definitely a scene from book 1, their relationship is different (it hasn't truly STARTED yet though the sexual attraction is there for both), and they haven't had a chance to evolve yet.
Thank you. :) Their development being a shift is what I want -- because I want it to read very much like human nature, to begin with.
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I know you do. xD I'm kinda hoping that with everyone being older things will er, even out a bit. :)
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The tags make me wonder how well it turned out.
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And yes, definitely poor Mari. Savin's at least not as big of an asshole as he could have been, because he does tell her what happened right away (it's the final straw of sorts for her). Jazz and Savin don't end up together for a while after that, though. Jazz meets...someone else, lol.
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Still love the ending.
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Thank you. :)
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I guess it's the evolution of a relationship and of the people in it. At the beginning, Savin is a quieter character and Jazz more assertive, and by the later parts of the series Jazz has been emotionally betrayed many times over (including by Savin) and Savin has been too much swayed by what it's like to have power (because even if he doesn't want it for its own sake, having it still changes you).
The fact that they do change, partly in relation to each other, in a way that is a shift rather than an aboutface is very true to human nature.
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Definitely. In Idol I focused a lot on when their relationship was falling apart, which meant focusing a lot on the third book. Since this is definitely a scene from book 1, their relationship is different (it hasn't truly STARTED yet though the sexual attraction is there for both), and they haven't had a chance to evolve yet.
Thank you. :) Their development being a shift is what I want -- because I want it to read very much like human nature, to begin with.
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