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lynzie914

Behind Glass: Part Two

Mar 27, 2010 00:28

Title: Behind Glass
Rating: PG-13
Summary: An accumulations of moments in the Watchtower as Chloe begins to heal and Oliver helps her get there. Begins directly after Warrior, and will eventually spoil everything up to Conspiracy.

A/N: The story will be completely from Chloe’s perspective as she deals with everything, so no shifts of POV for ( Read more... )

fanfic, fic: behind glass, fandom: smallville, character: oliver queen, character: chloe sullivan, ship: chloe/oliver

Comments 22

insanityclings March 27 2010, 23:25:16 UTC

This is absolutely lovely! I really like the pacing for the progression of their relationship. It seems very real the way they just slip into being together without really noticing or trying and then can't label it.

lynzie914 March 28 2010, 23:52:32 UTC

Thank you! I'm glad your liking it so far. And that you think its realistic. That's been one of my bigger worries with this one.

ophelia1234 March 28 2010, 01:41:50 UTC

I really, really like what you are doing with this story. This is EXACTLY the Chollie fic I've been wanting to see! You are doing a great, great job.

Can't wait to see where you take it!

lynzie914 March 28 2010, 23:53:15 UTC

Thank you so much! I'm really glad that you like it so much.

catheights March 28 2010, 04:00:23 UTC

Other days she hated it for the same reasons, for everything it reminded her of.

I can so imagine Chloe having conflicted feelings over Watchtower. I love how you bring that across.

“I think it means…that someday you’ll get another one.” Oliver told her gently. “One day so amazing that nothing will ever let you forget it.”

Oliver's response here really tugged at my heart strings. Just beautiful.

She felt Oliver’s hand on the small of her back as he moved to stand beside her and look over what Clark had given her.

I love how much is said with gestures rather than words.

Gorgeous writing!

lynzie914 March 28 2010, 23:59:16 UTC

Thank you so much!

I can so imagine Chloe having conflicted feelings over Watchtower. I love how you bring that across.

In my mind, the Watchtower has to be both a good and bad for Chloe. It was this beautiful place that Jimmy gave her, that represents how he felt for her, but its also the place that she lost everything. That has to cause some serious issues. Personally if it was me, I don't think I would be able to get rid of it, but I wouldn't be able to be there like she is either.

Oliver's response here really tugged at my heart strings. Just beautiful.

This is probably bad to say about something I wrote myself, but I kind of love that line. When I wrote it I literally said awww in my head and wished for an Ollie of my own.

latetothpartyhp March 28 2010, 04:45:05 UTC

I have the feeling I'm going to be curled up in a little ball under my desk by the time this is finished ( ... )

lynzie914 March 29 2010, 00:13:01 UTC

Thank you so much for your comment! (I love the detailed ones because it lets me know what people liked about it XD)

I have the feeling I'm going to be curled up in a little ball under my desk by the time this is finished.

Please don't end up under your desk! I don't want to be held responsible for that.

And yet the aloneness of it is heart-breaking, too. Ollie's gentleness with her in this is so beautiful, but she is so raw and so un-used to being taken care of.

I think thats really part of the tragedy of Chloe as a character. She's more used to not being loved, than she's used to experiencing it.

You get into what I think is going on in her head so well and write it so beautifully.

Thank you! I'm really glad that you like my portrayal of Chloe. I've been nervous about it, so its really nice to hear.

iluvaqt March 28 2010, 22:32:50 UTC

Heart aching over here, but then seeing her thought process, the nightmares she keeps reliving and every connection to her old life crumbling away, you get how she feels adrift and isolated. I love that she feels Oliver knows what she needs, respects her decisions and supports her without words. Once he picked himself up, he really did fill Clark's shoes as BFF. Well written and so painfully real. Great job.

lynzie914 March 29 2010, 00:16:29 UTC

Thank you! I'm glad that you like it! I don't think that SV's showed enough of Chloe's sitation and her grief after everything that happened, so I'm trying to delve into it on my own.

And yeah, in my mind Oliver's kind of grown into the role Clark once had. On the show you see the two of them together more and more and we're seeing Chloe and Clark together even less.