lj.idol.Topic.08: A Travelling Travesty

[lynxypoo]

-or- The Curse on the House of Candry

Marianne Candry was fifty-four and red. Paper trembled and crinkled between her fingers as she read the letter penned by her late husband eighteen years prior. If Edward lives past his thirty-seventh birthday, send flowers to Miss Mary Throm, and rejoice for the Curse on the House of Candry has been lifted!

Comments

[jacq22]

This is a wonderfully convoluted tale, very clever! Like the way it has a pattern to it.

[lynxypoo]

I'm glad you liked it! If you found it too confusing the first time through, feel free to read it again. I've added a bit more detail since this morning so hopefully it's more clear without losing its convolutedness :)

[lynxypoo]

Thanks for catching the italics. They were there in the original, but I missed it when I copied it over. I'll double check that tonight

[lynxypoo]

I put in a few more details over lunch, and fixed my italics. If you have time, let me know what you think? Is it enough to make it clearer that George was Theodore's plot to get rid of the curse, that Theodore felt horrible about what he'd done when he met little Georgie? Or who all of the characters were in the last scene? I admit that was a little (a lot) cryptic.

Basically, Edward and Marianne visit Mary to pay their respects to George, and Mary learns of Theodore's family. Whether or not Marianne shares the story of the curse or if George had any children is intentionally left open.

Thanks for all your input!

[shimmerdream]

I really enjoyed reading this, a very clever entry.

[lynxypoo]

Thank you! :)

[zeitgeistic]

I really liked this, though I admit I had to check the comments to clear up my confusion. I also thought the illegitimate son had escaped the curse because he didn't carry the name, and then I thought that both sons had died because of Theodore's treachery.

[lynxypoo]

Hmm. I wonder if the confusion lies in only Edward being mentioned (and not by name) as accompanying his mother to pay respects to Mary- Since Marianne had 2 boys, I suppose it could be thought that Peter was the one with Marianne that day, and that both George and Edward had died. Hmm indeed.

[whipchick]

Reminds me of a Bronte story, with all the lineages and family secrets!