To You

[lving_darkness]

A Promise Made to the Promise Keeper
I will follow you, sister,
forever, shaking,
placing my feat into your footsteps
feeling the residual warmth:
the hushed comfort;
as I toddle behind
never able to catch up
but always willing to follow.

love the title. =)
- not sure about forever, shaking, feel like shaking needs to be a different word. Ahh, idk.

Comments

[turkeyish]

aw, your family poems are so lovely. this is cute!

one minor thing...feat = feet?

and i'm rather partial to the word "trembling", myself. :P

[turkeyish]

Haha yes of course its feet

That's what happens when you don't look over before posting. I was just so damn proud to be back on track. =)

[lving_darkness]

that me ^^^ by the way.