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Avery (39/?)

Jun 11, 2012 22:45

Title: Avery
Chapter Summary: It's Casey and Allison's wedding day. Luke is standing alongside his two best friends, Reid is watching from the pews with Avery and Katie, and even finds himself enjoying the whole thing. What could possibly go wrong?
Notes: I wasn't planning to post this already, but a comment from the ever amazing ltklo on the last chapter ( Read more... )

!author|artist: sripley, fan fiction

Comments 10

scotianova June 12 2012, 07:12:12 UTC

WOW! Speechless - but in a good way!

sripley June 12 2012, 14:27:54 UTC

:D! <3

ltklo June 12 2012, 11:36:48 UTC

LOL! I haven't read the chapter yet but I had to reply to your note.

I can be such a brat. You give us a great chapter and I'm disappointed because there's no mention of Avery. But you know how I love this story and Avery. I was very excited to see the chapter and had these "Avery expectations". I got to the end of the chapter and thought "hey, where's Avery!". I repeat, I'm such a brat. LOL!

Off to read the chapter about "Avery at the wedding". :) Thank you my dear.

ltklo June 12 2012, 11:53:52 UTC

Terrific chapter. Great descriptions of everyone's movements and their interaction. I could really feel their emotions, especially Reid's. I really felt for Avery.

The boy turned and clung to him, gripping him around the neck desperately and crying.

"Home, home," he kept sobbing into Reid's shoulder. Reid smoothed his hair.

"It's alright, we're all going to be alright," he promised.

Love that sonnet. It was featured in the old "Beauty and the Beast" tv show.

sripley June 12 2012, 14:27:34 UTC

Haha! You are a brat, my dear ;) LOL! But in the best of ways!
I love that sonnet as well. I can't take credit for choosing it, though, lol. It's right out of the actual scene, a lot of little moments in this are, actually. I wanted to basically blend Luke, Avery and the other new characters into the original scene as seamlessly as possible.
Thank you as always for your lovely comments <3 I definitely wanted to use all of this chaos to show just how far Reid has come, and that he hasn't even really 'evolved', he's always been this kind of a person, he just never showed it. But now he has a reason to show the love and kindness in his heart, because he has people worth showing it to.

ltklo June 12 2012, 17:36:44 UTC

Ugh, that lovely sonnet was used at that sham of a wedding. Luckily, I'll probably forget that :)

shadownyc June 12 2012, 11:43:57 UTC

Very powerful and exciting!

The love between Luke and Reid showed quite clear with both their actions and reactions.

sripley June 12 2012, 14:27:46 UTC

Thank you so much! <3

sleeper6 June 14 2012, 02:27:49 UTC

Liked this! It's scary of course but suspenseful in a good way. Poor Avery though-- he was terrified.

Great chapter!

sripley June 14 2012, 02:44:15 UTC

I think that was the hardest part about writing this chapter for me - knowingly putting Avery into such a scary, dangerous situation. I knowwww, he's just a fictional character! But he's become my baby and I feel so bad doing that to him, and to everyone else xD Lol. But I promise this story has a happy ending so no one fear!