Dilandau Albatou| Vision of Escaflowne - Movie | ReservedcheekucheekJuly 1 2011, 05:45:11 UTC
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Name: Nel Livejournal Username: scaredsummoner E-mail: naimelhen@yahoo.com AIM/MSN: AIM: naimelhen Current Characters at Luceti: N/A
Character
Name: Dilandau Albatou Fandom: Vision of Escflowne (Movie) Gender: Male Age: 15 Time Period: Mid point when Folken was torturing him. Wing Color: Firey red HistoryNot much is known about Dilandau's past as well as his early childhood. The only small peek we get to see is during the time that Folken tortured him for disobeying orders. It was during this scene at the moment when Folken begins to question Dilandau on his past that we get that glimpse. Even though it was just two short and simple questions we get that small glimpse: Who was it that 'saved' him from wild dogs and who was it that gave him his Dragonslayers
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Dilandau Albatou| Vision of Escaflowne - Movie | ReservedcheekucheekJuly 1 2011, 05:46:36 UTC
PersonalityThe first thing that a person might notice about Dildandau is his love for battle and blood. His whole life and being is defined by fighting. The sight of fire and the smell of blood from the fallen soldiers give him life. He longs for battle as well as and every one-on-one fight to the point that he would provoke fights and battles on his own as long as he knows he can get away with it. His love of fighting might contribute to the fact that he is also very cocky and is sure that he will always when no matter what and if he doesn't win he will just have to destroy and burn everything contributed to the object/person. One last trait that comes from his battle lust is that he has a tendency to see those who have been conquered as beneath him. They are no longer people but objects to be used for his every whim and desire
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Dilandau Albatou| Vision of Escaflowne - Movie | ReservedcheekucheekJuly 1 2011, 05:55:22 UTC
((SORRY ABOUT THE HTML FAILURE! MY KINGDOM FOR AN EDIT BUTTON!))
Strengths:
PHYSICAL: Due to being half-dragon, Dilandau is a little bit stronger, faster and take more of a beating then a normal human. He also has what the people of Gaea likes to call, 'magical powers', which is a form of telekinesis manifested as green wind. But try to fitting his personality his dragon powers tends to destroy objects and people in it's path (shown here starting at 6:00 in and ends at 6:35ish). Also should any dragon armor appear that isn't Escaflowne, only Dildandau's blood can awaken it.
He is also a expert swordsman as well as an expert at horse riding as it shows him riding into battle, being able to still fight on his own against his enemies on both a horse and on his own two feet.
MENTAL:The only thing that he is mentally strong at is that whenever he is having a clear moment in his insanity, he is clever and can be a good leader when he needs to be. But that is only when his mental state is clear. This state is usually achieved with
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Re: Dilandau Albatou| Vision of Escaflowne - Movie | ReservedcheekucheekJuly 1 2011, 05:58:18 UTC
Samples
First Person: Q&A please.
Third PersonExtreme pain and floating in the air. There was also the feeling of a hand closing tightly around his neck despite there being no hand there was all that he can remember before darkness hits and the swiftness of unconsciousness overcoming him
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1. Did you have a hero or a special role model while growing up? Describe them.
What type of question is this? I have none of the sort. Any and all who have might have fitted into this mold was too weak to hold on their own. Such weaklings do not deserve to be either heroes or 'special' role models.
2. What's your opinion on your family, or how you were raised?
This 'family' you speak doesn't exist but for the way that I was raised? I suppose that I can't complain as I was raised to be stronger then the rest of the weaklings out there. Oh yes, very much so and those that try to be stronger will be torn apart.
3. What do you think of yourself? How do you value your own life?
Me? This is the easiest question you have asked so far. I am the best in the Black Dragon Clan's army as well as the most beautiful member as well. My own value? Isn't it obvious? My life has the highest priority and only mine is worth saving in the heat of battle.
4. What is more important: friendship or power?Power, what good will friendship be in
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Sorry for the delay! Your app looks good for the most part, but there are a lot of grammatical errors and issues in your third person sample, and it doesn't match the quality of the rest of the application. If you can edit the sample and repost it, that would be great. Thank you!
Sorry for all of the resends.cheekucheekJuly 12 2011, 01:48:46 UTC
It's all good! Yeah the quality of the 3rd was my bad as I just rushed through it without really looking at it to proofread it. ^^;;
3rd person sample:Extreme pain and floating in the air. There was also the feeling of a hand closing tightly around his neck despite there was no hand there was all that he can remember before darkness hits and the swiftness of unconsciousness overcoming him
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Re: Sorry for all of the resends.lucetimodsJuly 12 2011, 07:55:50 UTC
Sorry, but I'm not really seeing the sort of improvements I was looking for. Can you try again? Your other sample was good so I don't want to reject it based on the third person.
I suggest reading through it aloud, and check for things like:
proper punctuation
run-on sentences
past versus present tense
Just take it slow and read it over a few times; don't rush it. Don't be afraid to use shorter sentences!
Re: Sorry for all of the resends.cheekucheekJuly 13 2011, 05:07:19 UTC
There was extreme pain, floating in the air. There was also the feeling of a hand closing tightly around his neck even though there was no hand to be seen. All that he could remember before darkness hit was the swiftness of unconsciousness overcoming him
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Thank you! You're accepted, have some delicious copypasta.
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Name: Nel
Livejournal Username: scaredsummoner
E-mail: naimelhen@yahoo.com
AIM/MSN: AIM: naimelhen
Current Characters at Luceti: N/A
Character
Name: Dilandau Albatou
Fandom: Vision of Escflowne (Movie)
Gender: Male
Age: 15
Time Period: Mid point when Folken was torturing him.
Wing Color: Firey red
HistoryNot much is known about Dilandau's past as well as his early childhood. The only small peek we get to see is during the time that Folken tortured him for disobeying orders. It was during this scene at the moment when Folken begins to question Dilandau on his past that we get that glimpse. Even though it was just two short and simple questions we get that small glimpse: Who was it that 'saved' him from wild dogs and who was it that gave him his Dragonslayers ( ... )
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Strengths:
PHYSICAL:
Due to being half-dragon, Dilandau is a little bit stronger, faster and take more of a beating then a normal human. He also has what the people of Gaea likes to call, 'magical powers', which is a form of telekinesis manifested as green wind. But try to fitting his personality his dragon powers tends to destroy objects and people in it's path (shown here starting at 6:00 in and ends at 6:35ish). Also should any dragon armor appear that isn't Escaflowne, only Dildandau's blood can awaken it.
He is also a expert swordsman as well as an expert at horse riding as it shows him riding into battle, being able to still fight on his own against his enemies on both a horse and on his own two feet.
MENTAL:The only thing that he is mentally strong at is that whenever he is having a clear moment in his insanity, he is clever and can be a good leader when he needs to be. But that is only when his mental state is clear. This state is usually achieved with ( ... )
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First Person: Q&A please.
Third PersonExtreme pain and floating in the air. There was also the feeling of a hand closing tightly around his neck despite there being no hand there was all that he can remember before darkness hits and the swiftness of unconsciousness overcoming him ( ... )
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2. What's your opinion on your family, or how you were raised?
3. What do you think of yourself? How do you value your own life?
4. What is more important: friendship or power?
5. Describe the happiest and saddest moments of your life.
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What type of question is this? I have none of the sort. Any and all who have might have fitted into this mold was too weak to hold on their own. Such weaklings do not deserve to be either heroes or 'special' role models.
2. What's your opinion on your family, or how you were raised?
This 'family' you speak doesn't exist but for the way that I was raised? I suppose that I can't complain as I was raised to be stronger then the rest of the weaklings out there. Oh yes, very much so and those that try to be stronger will be torn apart.
3. What do you think of yourself? How do you value your own life?
Me? This is the easiest question you have asked so far. I am the best in the Black Dragon Clan's army as well as the most beautiful member as well. My own value? Isn't it obvious? My life has the highest priority and only mine is worth saving in the heat of battle.
4. What is more important: friendship or power?Power, what good will friendship be in ( ... )
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3rd person sample:Extreme pain and floating in the air. There was also the feeling of a hand closing tightly around his neck despite there was no hand there was all that he can remember before darkness hits and the swiftness of unconsciousness overcoming him ( ... )
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I suggest reading through it aloud, and check for things like:
Just take it slow and read it over a few times; don't rush it. Don't be afraid to use shorter sentences!
Reply
Reply
Please create your character journal, and join luceti, lucetiooc, lucetilogs, lucetilocked. You can also join luceticrack and lucetifans if you like, though it is not required. After you are accepted into the communities, reply to the friend add/remove post and the player contact post. Please note that the friend add/remove and contact posts are inaccessible until you are accepted into the community.
Once you have gotten settled, please remember to comment to housing and tell us where your character will be living! You may also sign your character up for drafts and register any pets he or she may have.
After all that, feel free to introduce yourself on the lucetiooc community so people know who you are (and more importantly, friend your new character!) For the sake of other players and their friend lists, please use the 'Date Out Of Order' option (which can be found by editing the date on your post) for informational posts like HMD, Relationships, Contact, and so on. It's also suggested (but not required) you disable custom comment pages ( ... )
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