[Bokurano] fic: Those Left Behind: This Conversation Never Happened

[lucathia_rykatu]

Title: Those Left Behind: This Conversation Never Happened
Day/Theme: Aug 28 This conversation never happened
Series: Bokurano
Character/Pairing: Anko and Komo's dads
Rating: PG
Notes: for 31_days. Manga canon. Spoilers up to chapter 42. Dialogue only fic! (what in the world am I thinking?)
Archive: LJ | ffnet

Comments

[digi_dragon]

I wanted this conversation ever since I found out Mr. Tokosumi learned of the kids' fate from Tomoe. Like, seriously. It's so heartbreaking, that he learned his daughter was going to die and by the time we see him he's hardened himself so much...

Dialogue pieces are hard. But it's beautiful, too. You managed to convey all feeling without a single describer. :)

[lucathia_rykatu]

This was a conversation I wanted to see. I didn't manage to give Anko's dad much time to think at the end here. But man, Anko's dad. ;__; He really hardened himself to carry on like that during Anko's fight. When he repeated his line asking where Anko had learned to speak like that at the end, that made my heart break.

I'm experimenting everyday~. I think I used a bit too many ellipses for pauses. It's hard to show hesitation with only dialogue. I kept wanting to throw in some description instead.

[digi_dragon]

Yeees. I cried so much at Anko's chapters. I cried at all of them. XD; But yes, it was so heart-wrenching. ;;

Everyone does that, honestly. XD Ellipses are abused by all. It worked, though, even with the ellipses.

[darkicedragon]

Eeeeee, yey for trying new things! :3

And awww~ at this entire thing. D: You can just hear the horror in Anko's dad's voice here when he finds out what'll happen after. And the last sentence. DD:

[lucathia_rykatu]

This was quite a bit of dialogue compared to how most of the other pieces almost didn't have any dialogue! :3

I was hoping to show that Komo's dad was pretty shaken up by this conversation too. *sniff*