[Bokurano] fic: Those Left Behind: Slightly Out of Character

[lucathia_rykatu]

Super late today! After not knowing what to write (this theme was actually going to be dedicated to Machi instead of yesterday's theme), this actually ended up as the longest piece so far. How did that happen?

Title: Those Left Behind: Slightly Out of Character
Day/Theme: Aug 27 Slightly out of character
Series: Bokurano
Character/Pairing: the

Comments

[digi_dragon]

Okay, first off I love how all of them have the same thoughts about Chizu, with very small differentiations. It's little, but it a big theme, showing that none of them could even notice anything different -- and how as they try to remember the happy girl she once was, they find something blocks it. It's a great way of leading up to where the Honda family is when we arrive at their revist during Machi and Ushiro's tour.

And that last line? Chilling.

[lucathia_rykatu]

This was a piece that wrote itself after I got started. I started with just Chizu's dad, but then her sister wanted a say too. You put it into words much better than anything I could say about what I was trying to do here. XD; Chizu's last chapter made a large impression on me, both with the storytelling (a bittersweet flashback chapter after the battle! completely different from the other pilots) and with how different Chizu was in it. Chizu's family is such a trusting family too. Other families probably would have reacted differently if their child had done what Chizu did.

Thanks for all your thoughtful comments. <3

[digi_dragon]

|D; I ramble on too much and analyze stories and stuff. So. Yeah. And jeez, it did, didn't it? The flashback broke me. I think I was crying after it. XD I just loved the look back on her and her family and how sad it was that...well, how much she changed. This whole segment just got that perfectly. :)

[darkicedragon]

DD: Aaaah, seeing the evidence of what Chizu did at work.

And how they see themselves contrary to what Chizu had called them.

[lucathia_rykatu]

Having someone he knows affected by the attacks makes everything all the more personal. ):