Put Away Childish Things (Part 2)

[lozenger8]

Title: Put Away Childish Things (Part 2)
Fandom: Life on Mars
Rating: NC-17
Word Count: 6,575 words this section. Approximately 11,500 words overall.
Notes: Sam/Gene slash, with mentions of Sam/Annie. Set after 2.08.

"When I was a child, I spake as a child, I understood as a child, I thought as a child: but when I became a man, I put away

Comments

[dodificus]

I love it how you really capture their energy and personalities. You totally represent the way they interact in the show and then add this whole doomed sexual element to it. Really good writing and very entertaining.

[lozenger8]

Thanks so much :D

*sigh* Yes, the doom. That's me, hardcore romantic.

[wiccagal_1996]

THe way you weave their changing relationship throughout other events and incidents, it's so perfectly constructed and a natural progression. The 'I love you but I'm not happy about it' way in which these two work is my favourite aspect of their partnership and 'It's never gonna be anything' but then Gene's admittance that he wishes it could be...perfect.
How do you do it?
xx

[lozenger8]

Thank you very much :)

[catwalksalone]

Wow, Loz - you did it again. Brilliant. I loved the use of the nursery rhymes (especially the last one, given the whole LoM premise) and how you wove real stories and metaphors of childhood through it all. I loved how it wasn't happily ever after but it was enough. I loved how Sam came to a greater understanding of Gene and how Gene obviously talked himself out of his relationship and then back in.

Wonderful way to spend some time on a Sunday morning. Thank you.

[lozenger8]

(especially the last one, given the whole LoM premise)

;) I hoped someone would mention that.

The childhood aspect of Life on Mars is a theme that's interested me for a long time, but I've never really capitalised on it before.

Thank you!

[bistokids]

I have no idea how you manage it - it's genius. Taking on themes that are pretty well-explored, the ones I look at and think 'Oh I'm not sure I've anything to add there', and then just revitalising them and giving them new depth. Partly it's your total familiarity with the way they speak, move and generally are. But it's more than that. You really are something very special!

Oh and: “It’s fibre of some kind.”

“Ah, yes, but there’s the rub - what kind?”

“Well, it looks synthetic,” Sam said, unsure.

Hang on. Am I meant to believe that was an accident?! Did I mention I love you? And I even got 'enigmatic' later on, just as if I wasn't already completely overcome!

[lozenger8]

>:)

I had the scene with Oswald planned already, because I love Oswald with a kind of fervent passion I'm sure was never meant to be directed his way. And then you made that comment about 'synthetic' on "No Sweeping Exits" and I thought, "right..." :D

That was just for you. ♥

Thanks so much. I have to admit that I was feeling much the same way - that it had been done, so what was the point? But the point was that I really, really wanted to do it. That I had to prove to myself that I could write another story with plot, that I wanted to write more Sam/Gene slash, that I hadn't yet written much about the importance of childhood in Life on Mars.

This is a permutation of the long fatalistic Sam/Gene story I've been promising myself I wouldn't write since I started watching the show. (This is number 3, I think, hahaha.)

[liquorishflame]

I dispair, because this is perfection story wise (even though it is very sad :() and how can anyone (like me) try to capture all the subtlety that you have? Just amazing, please write more!
Love Gene coming to Sam's rescue, and Sam bargin into Gene's house, drunk. :)

[lozenger8]

Thank you :D