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fanfiction - Thursday Night (ichihime)

May 08, 2010 23:09

TITLE: Thursday Night.
AUTHOR: lovely-zombie
PAIRING: Ichigo and Orihime.
RATING: MA+18 (for sex)
DISCLAIMER: I don't own Kubo Tite's Bleach.

( Thursday night - Ichigo loves it, Orihime loves it, even Gandhi loves it. )

ichigo and orihime, my fanfiction, dedication; ihbff

Comments 36

365daysafter May 9 2010, 17:06:21 UTC

hurr hurr ♥

lovely_zombie May 11 2010, 08:21:30 UTC

( ... )

autumnleaving May 10 2010, 05:04:12 UTC

lovely!

lovely_zombie May 11 2010, 08:21:45 UTC

thanks!

autumnleaving May 11 2010, 08:48:20 UTC

Wait, omfg I just realized...

You're also cereal_killerz!

And also, I re-read it and found a couple of typos. Nothing major.

Orihime bites her lip as she stares at her boyfriends' boyfriend's clenched face, (It's a possessive, yes? "Boyfriends'" is the possessive for many boyfriends.)

...the metallic taste of blood slightly there soon after her nicks his tongue in her teeth (Did you mean "she nicks his tongue in her teeth," "he nicks his tongue in her teeth," or "her teeth nicks his tongue"?

I'm sorry! The grammar nerd prevails, I'm not trying to be mean, it's just that it's a really good story and... and... okay, I'm stopping. :(

flippantsoup May 14 2010, 19:58:12 UTC

(late but) so good, chronicle this shit ;A;

I don't have any critism except that it'd be relevant to my interests if Inoue were to blow Ichigo if you ever make a second installment.

*thumbs up*

lovely_zombie May 17 2010, 05:48:23 UTC

8D thankyou pervysage.
ohh, well then you'll like this RANDOM PORNO THING I AM WRITING BECAUSE I AM SICK LIKE THIS.

/high fivessss

flippantsoup May 18 2010, 21:38:46 UTC

DON'T APPROACH ME WITH SUCH MATERIALS.

/high fives

amcapril May 17 2010, 00:54:07 UTC

wow I can't read the rest of this
O_O

lovely_zombie May 17 2010, 05:50:36 UTC

... is that a good or bad thing, lol?

amcapril May 18 2010, 05:07:18 UTC

it depends
your a good fanfic writer
but i dont think i could read the rest of this lol

how did i miss this? nypsy2 May 10 2011, 04:12:03 UTC

i only just came across this via 'across the universe' ship manifesto. not sure how it escaped me when written... great job. 'love of his life' being my favorite line, along w/the little kiss to the nose & touching foreheads. i love lemons w/those little touches elevating from 'smut' to making love.