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taken_with_you May 25 2006, 20:08:15 UTC
This pout, this one right here? It's allll for because of you.

This fic brought tears to my eyes...I was able to maintain my dignity by not actually *shedding* them, thank God, LOL. You managed to envoke all of the heartache that a divorce entails, along with the singular characterization of Logan's self-hatred and isolationism. The most heartwrenching was the loneliness that you made palpable between Logan and Veronica, and the revelation at the end that she is, in fact, pregnant with his child. *sigh*

Favorite part: His hands traveled further up her thighs as he ravished her mouth. His finger traced along the edge of her panties. However, he pulled back suddenly. “Promise me we won’t be like them. Fighting over the china and money,” he asked seriously.

*kisses you all over* Well done, my darling.

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veni_veni_veni May 25 2006, 20:14:01 UTC
:: sniff :: You're gonna make me cry, babe. Thank you so much. I'm glad you... enjoyed? it. ::HUGS::

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rowanceleste May 25 2006, 20:17:25 UTC
Holy shit! You can't just leave it like that! I know Logan likes to test her but I can't believe he actually cheated on her and thought 'I'm sorry' would be a magic wand to make things better...now that he's lost her and she's pregnant (not that he knows) I want to see him beg, plead, grovel and be persistant so Martin DOESN'T replace him just because Martin's not an ass...

Please don't leave it there!

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veni_veni_veni May 25 2006, 20:23:57 UTC
Unsure at this time. I've discussed with the group. Some are in favor of a sequel. Perhaps I should have just continued it? I have thoughts flowing with where I could go with it.

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rowanceleste May 25 2006, 20:54:21 UTC
I really hope you do continue it! I'm still surprised that Logan cheated on her...I could see him letting her think that to test her, but to actually do it? ..It makes me nauseous and I'm glad Veronica's divorcing him..I still want my happy ending though where he realizes that he's a fucking moron and now that he's had the realization, he takes the chance to finally grow up and win her back before he truly loses her to someone else. I'm in the middle of writing a fic where they get or are getting divorced, but I refused to let Logan be THAT self-destructive heh, I shouldn't give away all my story though LOL...he definitely has fuck-up tendencies though that's for sure...

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veni_veni_veni May 25 2006, 21:01:14 UTC
I could see him letting her think that to test her, but to actually do it?

... And I promised myself that I wouldn't give anything away. That possibility in the sequel stands and as I was writing it, I tried to keep it open to intrepertation.

We shall see what happens.

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cinaya19 May 25 2006, 20:34:11 UTC
Wow. Depressing.

These are the only two words floating through my head right now. Very moving, but I hope you do a follow-up story even if it's outside the challenge. I don't honestly think Logan would cheat on Veronica. Still, the Logan here is right on with his cynicism and pessimistic beliefs. Since I'm a LoVe shipper, I obviously feel sad by the ending, but it's still a great story. If you do decide to continue this story, please make it a happier ending.

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veni_veni_veni May 25 2006, 20:38:06 UTC
Yeah, this was my first attempt at something angsty. Usually I'm all for happy endings.

Thank you for the comments :)

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cinaya19 May 26 2006, 02:55:33 UTC
Are you sure this is your first attempt at angst? This is pretty depressing for a first time. Again, great job!

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shellabelle81 May 25 2006, 20:36:13 UTC
I really liked this! I hope you do continue with it :)

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veni_veni_veni May 25 2006, 20:38:53 UTC
Thank you! Glad you liked it.

If I can finish up my other stories, I certainly will entertain the idea of a sequel.

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holly96 May 25 2006, 21:04:35 UTC
I have a hard time believing that Logan would ever cheat on Veronica, especially when things are good between them, but I can totally see him pushing her away because he's afraid she'll leave anyway.

I definitely think you should do a follow-up. Even if they don't end up together (although I'd prefer that, of course), I really want Logan to know she's pregnant. One of my personal hangups in stories is when the father doesn't know about a pregnancy. I'm of the opinion that there are very few occasions when it's okay not to tell the father, and this doesn't fit the bill for me. I understand that Logan was a jackass and Veronica has every right to not go back to him and want to move on, and the baby complicates things, but I don't think it's fair to lie to him about that. So I want him to find out, or Veronica to change her mind and tell him. Doesn't she want her baby to know her father, even if they're not together?

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veni_veni_veni May 25 2006, 21:07:39 UTC
Hmm... apparently I left things too vague - which was partially intentional, but now it's just upsetting people. Hrm :/

But thank you for your comments. :)

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holly96 May 25 2006, 21:26:22 UTC
Oh, I'm not terribly upset. Just...confused? And looking forward to more. I think you did a good job, but I'd like more before I can decide exactly how I feel about it.

You did have that line where Logan said something about it not being like that, and it did get me thinking, but then he never said anything else about it, and I would think that unless he's more masochistic than I thought that he'd have told her the truth by now. But I'll give you the benefit of a doubt and just sit back and wait for a sequel.

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veni_veni_veni May 25 2006, 21:34:58 UTC
Woo hoo! Benefit of the doubt :) Thanks for reserving judgement until later. Hopefully, I won't let you guys down.

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