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Don't Look Back - afrocurl

Jun 20, 2006 07:53

Title: Don't Look Back
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Comments 27

insunshine June 20 2006, 15:29:27 UTC

Hee!!! This is SO great!

I love the way that they play off each other, and I especially love the 'boyfriend/girlfriend' thing.

Awesome job, hon!

afrocurl June 20 2006, 15:32:04 UTC

Aww--thanks for the help! It's better because of you, and Sarah!

insunshine June 20 2006, 15:34:46 UTC

Well, it was my pleasure. Seriously.

sitebuilderchic June 20 2006, 16:31:57 UTC

This was so awesome! I loved it so much, girl. The whole "boyfriend/girlfriend" thing was cute!

afrocurl June 20 2006, 17:04:50 UTC

Thanks for the love!

The end was really fun to write, and I'm glad that it seems to fit the rest of the story.

sarah_p June 20 2006, 16:36:00 UTC

Okay, I couldn't wait, so I comment now :). You already know my thoughts on this (in fact, you have extensive notes :P), but to retierate:

I LOVE the set-up. Bringing Harvey in as the catalyst for the Palm Springs trip is really original, and I love the nod back to his character. Very cool.

Logan setting up pillows. I don't know why, but it's awesome.

The heat. And the hot sex. Always good things ;).

THIS PART:

“Are you ready for another round, girlfriend?”

“I think so, boyfriend,” she said as coyly as she could given the circumstances.

Can you 'awwwww' with me :). AWWWW!

Really impressive for your first fic, and I hope it's just the first of MANY. :)

afrocurl June 20 2006, 16:40:06 UTC

Thank you! The evilness of CA last week made me think of this idea, and then you had me run with it, so I'm glad the idea actually worked out well.

Logan, if nothing else, is very perceptive of what needs to be done in certain situations. He is a gentleman, after all. ;)

smiles1_9 June 20 2006, 18:37:12 UTC

This was awesome for your first fic, great job! I loved that they finally had "the talk" and that it of course ended in sex- all the best talks should. Loved it!

afrocurl June 20 2006, 23:20:42 UTC

Why thank you for the praise.

"The talk" seemed like something that needed to happen, and I can't tell if we'll see that during S3.

anonymous June 20 2006, 20:04:50 UTC

I loved this...so funny and actually kinda sweet! :)

afrocurl June 20 2006, 23:17:31 UTC

Thanks! Glad you enjoyed the story.