Novel?

[love_me_gentily]

Here's a novel i've been working on for a few years...it might not be as good as my recent works (because i've improved since i started it) but....meh...this is the prologue and the first chapter ^^

Comments

[tofumice]

Hee, the line is very good, nice detail, vocabulary could use a little bit of work along with the flow. It seems more like an outline to me than an actual story (if you don't mind me saying so). Still, I liked the developement of the story very much!

[love_me_gentily]

Like i said, i started this a few years ago, so the more recent chapters have my current writting lvl (4+)

glad ya liked lol working on Virtues...ack lol

[tofumice]

HEEEEEEEEEEEEEE! Virtues was my favorite besides Lonely Hearts (though I believe that Virtues was written better...) and yeah I know that this was written a while ago, but perhaps maybe you could go through it and fix it up.

Aint it nice to see how much you've improved over the years?

[love_me_gentily]

Lol i'm gunna post it tomorrow (jus finish it)

Yeah it sure is, i did try to fix the prologue up a bit, but i couldn't/can't be stuffed at the mo lol

[aurora_sakura]

Cool^^

But you should find maybe a novel forum to post this in because it isn't a fanfic. You'd get better reviews and comments if you post it in something like that I think since they are specifically looking for stories rather then fanfics.

[love_me_gentily]

Oh...i don't know any, but thankies ^^

Can you recomend a site?

[aurora_sakura]

well...there must be a group on LJ that specializes in writing? You should find one of those