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[callie_girl]

Title: Fine
Summary: Moody had been sent to deal with Longbottom after news of his relationship with Alice Pendleton got out.
Characters: Alastor Moody, Frank/Alice
Rating: PG
Note: written for the first love_lingers Mid-Month Challenge. I've actually had this done for a couple weeks now. Just never seemed to find the time to post.

Comments

[orngsnapdragon]

This is wonderful. You've captured Moody perfectly- gruff and crotchety but a good guy at heart. And wow, the way you've told this. All the emotions bubbling just beneath the surface and about to break through. It creates a fantastic kind of tension.

Great work.

[oddsbobs]

Totally agree with orngsnapdragon about Moody... perfectly in character!

Frank and Alice's relationship comes across wonderfully and subtlely. Even through the (rather sad) ending. Love love love.

By the way, where did you get Alice's last name? It's not cannon is it? (I'm far too lazy to look anything up right now) I ask this because I love it, and if you made it up, can I use it?

Can't wait to read more from you!

oh and before I forget... Imaginary Cookie for responding to the first challenge!

[orngsnapdragon]

I second the stealing of Alice's last name. I haven't been able to think of a proper one and keep having to type adhajfd in my roughs in hopes of something good coming along.

So may we? Pretty, pretty please?

[callie_girl]

have at it. :)

[callie_girl]

Sorry this took so long. Things have been too busy recently. But thanks!

The name isn't canon, no. And I didn't make it up, no. I play Alice in an RP and the girl who played her before me came up with the name. I don't know where she got it from but it's genius. And sure, go ahead if you want to use it. :)

[lyras]

I totally misread your summary, so I was expecting a past Moody/Alice relationship to be affecting the current Alice/Frank. Glad to see that it's less complicated than that :).

I liked the observations re women becoming Aurors, and Moody's attitude to the bigotry, both of which struck me as spot on. And oh, the ending is so portentious. Beautifully done.

[callie_girl]

...I hate writing summaries. Hate it. And I'm bad at it. And that's the kind of thing my Editing profesor would have my head for. I need to be more careful with my modifiers blah blah blah. But yeah, it does read that way.

And I'm glad those things came off well, I was worried about the way Moody was reading. Thanks.

[confiteor_3]

Moody is great in this. I love the last name you've choosen for Alice. I may be temped to use it if need be. If that's no problem, I mean. Lovely, fantastic work!

[callie_girl]

Thanks. And sure, go for it. :)