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eollfan in lotseekerfic

Chapter Three of Aftershock

Dec 17, 2010 21:41

Chapter Three

Later that evening, Zedd was trying to find them something to eat. He had been elected to hunt, since he could use magic to stop anything he found. Richard was gathering wood for the fire. As he was picking up some larger sticks, he spotted a baby gar. He was sort of smiling at Richard, and he hopped forward. Richard said, ''Hello ( Read more... )

characters: richard, user: eolfan, genre: action/adventure, rating: pg-13, characters: zedd, characters: cara, characters: kahlan, genre: het

Comments 3

auntlolo_73 December 20 2010, 00:56:30 UTC

If English is your first language, this is awful.

Really eollfan December 24 2010, 09:59:58 UTC

That was just plain rude you could have said nothing at all

Re: Really auntlolo_73 December 26 2010, 01:16:22 UTC

Yes it was, but if you want to write quality fic, you need bounce your fic off of a beta or two, flesh out your sentences and describe the characters surroundings and what they are doing and thinking. Your sentence structure as it's currently written is limited. One question to ask yourself before you post your fic for everyone to read and critique is whether you think it's as good as your favorite fics and authors.