Fic - And There's Not a Cloud in the Sky - John/Sherlock - R

[lotherington]

Title: And There's Not a Cloud in the Sky
Author: lotherington
’Verse: Long Ago and Far Away
Fandom: Sherlock
Characters/Pairing: John/Sherlock, Lestrade
Summary: WWII AU. November, 1944. For the first time in years, Sherlock and John have a case.
Rating: R
Word Count: ~1,900
Notes: The title is from There's a Land of Begin Again.

Comments

[r34dinglight]

once again lovely use of detail to fully flesh out their world. small things like the sandbag's smell but also other points like john's automatic response of a smile upon seeing sherlock's approach all fit together to make this feel real. the checking his watch reference as a tie to your use of time throughout the verse was lovely as well.

sorry you/your work seems to be under such negative scrutiny at the moment. i'm glad, but not surprised, to see that you are staying gracious under the pressure. doing this isn't easy tho, kudos for your efforts!

[noirrosaleen]

Huh. I guess you're now an Established Writer - you have a troll of your very own! Or possibly a nest of them (although all the OP anons sound the same, and 4 in a row? Hardly coincidence). How sweet! *rhe*

Anyway, onto what I was saying before TROLOLOLOLOLOLOLOLOLOLOLOLOL occurred - AGH NO SHERLOCK WHAT?! Wait no! Case! DAMMITALL! *flails*

Ok, dammit, the next had better be soon - I can't perch on the edge of my seat forever!

[the_drummergirl]

So glad to see another instalment

[the_drummergirl]

For my two pence worth, in a WWII story set in London to have the characters neither directly or indirectly affected by bombing would be unrealistic

Yes. But having Sherlock fly through the air as John watches was such a cliché moment that it was as if it was out of some paperback romance novel. In addition, having Sherlock hurt is just one more thing that he's been through. It's one more Whump moment.

Sherlock has already nearly lost John. Purely from a writer's point of view, why have him revisit those emotions? Let's see John deal with them, nearly (well I hope nearly, not actually...) losing the man he loves

John has been dealing with Sherlock's emotions since "All that May Fall From the Skies Above" John was off to the frontlines and Sherlock is "It's not fair" "I need you" and so, John has to deal with Sherlock's emotions, comfort Sherlock, and basically be made to feel guilty because of Sherlock. Since then, it's never stopped. Ever. It's Sherlock being whumped at every moment he can be and John constantly dealing with the

[the_drummergirl]

I think you misunderstood my use of the phrase 'John is a strong character'. I want him to receive comfort as much as you do, and I agree that Sherlock was doing a lot of taking and not a lot of giving. But the nature of the characters is that John is a stoic and Sherlock is emotionally immature and a little but selfish. Maybe this is the event that will finally cause John to lose it after holding it together for so long, so we will get to see the helplessness and pain and anger. I want to see those from John as much as you. That's what I meant by 'Let's see John deal with them' - Not 'them' as in 'Sherlock's emotions' but 'them' as in 'those specific emotions, himself'. Sorry for ambiguous phrasing

[anonymous]

When I started this, I really didn't know where it was leading. It wasn't something I usually read but something about it made me want to read.

The latter parts were very interesting, and I really admired how you fit Sherlock and John into the times. But then John was shot.

I have to agree with the majority of the reviewers here: The way you wrote John's injury with the scene in the hospital and all other scenes after were a major disappointment.

What really put me off was the fact that you sank so low into one of the most nauseating tropes in this fandom. The: "John is seriously injured, but who cares because Sherlock is upset" you just sank to it and it made me sink. John's been shot, is in astounding pain amd Sherlock says "...I love you. I'm so sorry I never said it" John responds with the equivalent of "that's o.k." and then this happens:

'I'm here,' John whispered. 'I'm here.' His hand moved to stroke Sherlock’s hair and the soothing, familiar touch brought Sherlock to his knees, gasping for breath as he rested his head

[anonymous]

Remember, to disappoint people, you have to have raised their expectations.

I'll also be a bit disappointed if Sherlock is badly hurt, but it is still beautiful writing and I'll be looking forward to the next installment.

~ Carrie