STORYTIME!!!

[lostdestiny]

ok i have a story...i was bored in class and decided to write. xD its bad though but wutever

It felt cold in her hand, an empty horrific cold. She trembled as she held it, and finally let go, allowing it to give a clutter as it fell to the ground. Staring at the freshly dead body that lay before her, she sobbed and fell to her knees. She had

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[unlady_like]

oooh, starting to like the storyline :)

she should use those giant black garbage bags to hide body...and then iono bout the weapon..cuz they might find fingertip markings :O

[lostdestiny]

yah i know..but i cant think of anything else to call cigarettes...and parts are left vague cuz its an intro...so im trying to use variation of words...without giving away too much info. xD

[xiaoj0jo]

hey jennifer. nice story. reminds me of tiffany's story. lol. add me k? my other was messed up.

[lostdestiny]

lol shh! she had started writing a story in class...and i was bored so i started too..but it has no similarities...except that people die. haha

[anonymous]

and the part "a ziploc bag for the murder weapon" make it more clear, don't be that vague. write "a ziploc bag to place the murder weapon in"

[choc0latt3]

wow
nice
everything was going great until you said the light bulb hovered over her head. It sounds really literal. make it more figurative.

[lostdestiny]

it seemed as if a lightbulb suddenly hovered her head since she began to quicken her steps.

hows that?

[choc0latt3]

still a little weird,

I'm still getting a picture of a live animate lightbulb moving over on top of her head :/

[lostdestiny]

hrrmmm so how should i do it?