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ultharkitty in lost_carcosa

Fic - Recall, Chapter 3

Apr 22, 2011 08:46

Title: Recall, Chapter 3
Continuity: G1, Dysfunction AU
Rating: NC-17 overall, this chapter R (to be safe)
Content advice: abduction, non-con, manipulation of various kinds including sexual, graphic violence, dark themes
Beta: naboru_narluin
Disclaimer: Just playing in the sandbox, characters not mine.
Characters: Vortex, First Aid, Drag Strip, Wildrider, ( Read more... )

au: dysfunction, vortex, breakdown, first aid, wildrider, continuity: g1, drag strip, series: twister

Comments 11

spacehussy April 22 2011, 09:56:36 UTC

Ahahahaha oh my goodness, I enjoy this far too much. The suspense is delicious <333 I think I love that the creepy bits with Vortex are followed by ADORABLE STUNTICONS. I love that Vortex gets babysitters for First Aid.

(Well, come to think of it, the things that make them cute to me really are terrifying. The TV channel is more important to them than the Autobot prisoner they're hanging out with. Sure, they aren't actively torturing him or trying to cause him pain, but their nonchalance is distressing in an entirely different way.)

Can I just say that Vortex taking his time with First Aid is so hot and so goddamn creepy I could just hide under my bed and never come out?

"Back in the Ark, you told me to be honest," Vortex said. As he spoke, light glinted from a long and slender ridge which ran from his lower lip down to his throat. A welding scar. "I take it you still value honesty?"

*purr* And trying to get First Aid to retract his mask, unffff.

he subroutine screamed at him; acquiesce, be weak, do what you're told. He ignored ( ... )

ultharkitty April 22 2011, 10:29:18 UTC

YES! OMG I'm SO pleased about the cute/terrifying thing! :D To me, that's the scariest thing about them - that they're happy to give First Aid energon treats and get him drunk, and they're not actively/violently malicious towards him, but there's no way he's ever getting an ally there - not even Breakdown. And none of them would ever think to try to get him out of there.

And SQUEEEE, thankyou! Really glad you like it <3

Mwahahahahahahahahaha!

peacewish April 22 2011, 13:30:23 UTC

Stunticons = most unreliable babysitters ever. Silly cons, don't get the charge drunk. Vortex will never tip you for that!

An all around entertaining/creepy chapter. Poor First Aid, not cut out for infiltration whatsoever, huh? Jazz would have blown a hole in the Nemesis with the tools he had on hand and been gone in ten minutes. Aid is just too sincere. Course, that's obviously what drew Vortex's attention in the first place. He's gonna seduce the hell out of this poor little baby, isn't he?

ultharkitty April 22 2011, 20:42:46 UTC

lol, yes!

I'm happy it came across as creepy as well as entertaining! And yep, not at all cut out for infiltration. Still, he has his strengths. (And Vortex totally has seduction in mind - although whether or not things go his way is another matter)

Thanks for reviewing, I'm glad you enjoyed it :D

swindleslog April 23 2011, 01:33:54 UTC

Well, on the one hand, its nice to know Aid isn't going to get violently raped and tortured, and that's really just confirming what you already put forth. If Vortex was going to get nasty, he'd have done so by now.

On the other hand- being kept isolated in a room, captive and far from home until you say 'yes' is hardly a pleasant idea.

Isolated is up for debate thought; I guess Vortex figures- hey, Aid is a young vehicle alt. So are the Stunticons. That's probably comforting, right? Though they may be there simply because he knows how to manipulate them, and because they are aware of what he could do to them too. And I don't doubt Vortex knows Breakdown was there before.

But what are those three up to? We have yet to learn their idea. And what exactly is it that has Vortex so creepily fixated?

ultharkitty April 23 2011, 05:51:50 UTC

Yeah, absolutely. And being kept away from his team is enough of a torture for him all by itself.

As for the Stunticons - and because of high grade and TV. Free booze and entertainments? They're totally there.

I really enjoy your speculations btw (plus they're helpful in getting me to see things in ways I hadn't already, which is very useful as I puzzle my way through writing part 2 :) )

swindleslog April 24 2011, 02:19:03 UTC

Well, hey, at least my ponderings are helpful. And if it gets me more delicious fic, I am all for helping. nom nom nom.

mjfastlane April 25 2011, 02:24:57 UTC

My tummy's all aflutter with nervous butterflies now. Oh god, what are you up to, Vortex? No wait, don't answer that - I definitely don't want to know.

And Stunticons babysitting - oh my lord, give him booze, pfft. What sort of babysitting service is this? And watching Oprah, oh dear.

I doubt the fleeting moment of cute/insane is going to make up for whatever's coming, but I'll just pretend it will anyway.

In conclusion, excellent work, somewhat apprehensive about more but will definitely read it anyway!

ultharkitty April 25 2011, 06:32:12 UTC

Thankyou! :D And thanks for sticking with it despite how dark it is. Hopefully First Aid's strengths will shine through and make that worthwhile :)

What sort of babysitting service is this? The awesome and slightly deranged sort? :P

mjfastlane April 26 2011, 03:26:02 UTC

Well, it's not too bad atm. It's just I know it's going to get worse, and like a trainwreck or car accident, there is no looking away. In the best possible way, of course :P

Evidently! Reminds me of Daddy Daycare a little, actually. But with GIANT ROBOTS!

ultharkitty April 26 2011, 06:55:54 UTC

Yep, it really wouldn't be a spoiler to say that bad things will happen. I'm glad it's got the trainwreck effect, that's really encouraging :D

LOL! Maybe Scavenger and Scrapper should have shown up, that would have been SO adorable! Although they'd have probably run out of space on the bunk :P