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Fic - Something to Live For, Chapter 6 of 14

Sep 21, 2010 08:57

Title: Something to live for
Chapter 6: An unexpected visitor
Continuity: G1, Dysfunction AU
Rating: R
Content advice: mention of rape, verbal sexual harassment, violence (imagined and actual).
Disclaimer: Just playing in the sandbox, characters not mine.
Characters and/or pairings: Vortex, Prowl, First Aid, with small appearances by Skyfire, ( Read more... )

au: dysfunction, skyfire, vortex, perceptor, first aid, wheeljack, prowl, series: twister

Comments 19

__wilderness__ September 21 2010, 11:01:49 UTC

Okay yeah wow. Wasn't expecting that last line! Go 'Aid.

ultharkitty September 22 2010, 07:00:59 UTC

IMO, First Aid is one of the definitions of awesome ;)

Thanks for reading and commenting! :D

eerian_sadow September 21 2010, 17:59:29 UTC

and apparently Vortex is what it takes to make the pacifist take a shot.

this was a powerful chapter, in more ways than one. nice work.

ultharkitty September 22 2010, 07:03:26 UTC

Apparently so ;)

Thankyou! :D I'm really glad you think so :D *squees*

kyra_neko_rei September 22 2010, 02:58:24 UTC

Ohhhh! Vortex is just . . . everything here. Pure complexity---the line about mounting Prowl's doorwings was nasty and really shows his utter lack of comprehension/concern for others' experience, and then he's sort of opening up a bit to First Aid and being surprisingly UNcreepy about his motivations for the Blades thing (although it doesn't match the shame and regret line, so he's either lying or rewriting things as he goes along, or was telling the truth and just made that parting shot to Blades because he could and he liked the idea, sorta like the doorwings again) . . . and then First Aid ( ... )

kyra_neko_rei September 22 2010, 03:12:04 UTC

I want more-or-less-consensual Vortex/First Aid now.

Hmmm . . . could recycle the general premise of the Vortex/Fireflight one that I can't seem to finish . . .

ultharkitty September 22 2010, 07:26:26 UTC

Ooooh, that would be awesome. I'd totally be up for reading that :D

ultharkitty September 22 2010, 07:24:31 UTC

Thanks for reading and for the feedback :D *has squee*

although it doesn't match the shame and regret line, so he's either lying or rewriting things as he goes along He's lying. He's just saying what he thinks will give him a telling reaction so he can work out what to do next. Had he known he was going to get captured, he totally wouldn't have given Blades the shame and regret line. ;)

Vortex being manipulated into letting himself be handled by First Aid is a seriously tempting concept ;)

Thread 5

mjfastlane September 22 2010, 04:22:09 UTC

Your Vortex is so complex, for a crazy bastard. Which is exactly how crazy bastards should be. I like villains/anti-heroes/bad guys to have depth, and this is good and deep and pretty much just awesome.

And I don't really know what I want to say about First Aid, because holy bejeebus. Wow. I don't even know; shooting at Vortex? Or is he? Because I see that convenient cliffhanger, and I am suspicious of it >:/

So yeah, good work; I'm on the edge of my seat here for more (and apologies for not commenting on the last chapter, since I was giving blood to SAVE LIVES, or something - it was awesome too :P).

ultharkitty September 22 2010, 06:59:59 UTC

Yay! Thankyou :D It's so good to read that his characterisation is coming across like that. I also love bad guys to be complex and have depth, and I wanted him to be the kind of bad guy I like reading about :P

Admission time - I don't usually like ending chapters on cliffhangers, but this one was getting long, and it seemed like a convenient place for a scene break. *shakes head at self* *has a lot to learn about structuring long stories*

(I love your suspicion about the cliffhanger :P *glomps*)

Giving blood is important, and awesome :D (over here we get biscuits after, and stickers, which always amuses me :P OK, I'm nosy now, do you get biscuits for donating?) (glad you liked the last chapter too!)

mjfastlane September 22 2010, 07:40:29 UTC

He is most definitely very, very interesting, so no need to worry on that front :)

And sometimes cliffhangers are necessary. I don't mind them too much so long as they're not used every single chapter :D So I think I can forgive you one cliffhanger.

What can I say; I'm a cynic at heart. Suspicious cliffhanger is suspicious B|

We get stickers if we're first-time donors (which I was) and they make us eat chocolates and crackers after, as well as drink little poppers of juice :D Yay for giving blood!

ultharkitty September 22 2010, 07:53:55 UTC

You get juice! And chocolates? Damn. We get tea (which I don't like) or squash (which I don't drink unless it's sugar free, yeah I'm awkward!). But we do get custard cream biccies, and that's really nice :D

Aaaanyway, I'd by cynical too. After all, it's First Aid :P (even though this is set waaaaaay before the Swindle incident).

I'm now going to check I don't have any other cliffhangers. I don't think I do... :P

Thread 6

spacehussy September 23 2010, 10:20:03 UTC

gjfdhkjhsg where do I even begin with this chapter ( ... )

ultharkitty September 24 2010, 14:42:53 UTC

Totally not tl;dr :P And thankyou! :D *is altogether too bouncy* I'm so glad you enjoyed this one, and so very happy that you noticed the thing where First Aid totally isn't apologising to Vortex :D

Re. V and sensation: So glad you're enjoying that! And that it works for you :D \o/ Took me ages and a lot of rp to work out what (in my head canon) was going on with him re. the Detention Centre. I'm still working on the others!

*bounces more* :D