Comments | losseflame: Burnt Promises, UruhaxAoi, [ONESHOT]

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Burnt Promises, UruhaxAoi, [ONESHOT]

Mar 27, 2010 17:21

Title: Burnt Promises
Author: losseflame
Chapters: ONESHOT
Genre: Romance, Drama
Warnings: Um...not quite smut but there's kissing! And nail-digging! And teasing!XDD
Rating: PG-15
Pairings/Characters: UruhaxAoi
Synopsis: They’re not so much kissing as feeding off each other, fingers twisting into hair and mouths bruising.
Comments: This is general creative ( Read more... )

fanfic, oneshot, the gazette, uruhaxaoi

Comments 22

1337_lurker March 27 2010, 21:33:49 UTC

FIRST!

1337_lurker March 27 2010, 21:35:41 UTC

Okay, yeah, I read this way before I got off my ass to post it for you, but hey, at least I posted it right? Anyway, y'know how people fav+ things in deviantART? Yeah, well you can do that in LJ too. You add entries into your memories. And this is going into mine. ♥

erikaoi March 27 2010, 22:34:21 UTC

Aw,hawt kissing.yay they want to get together again

losseflame March 28 2010, 06:34:47 UTC

Oh, yes. They just can't stay apart. >:D

silveryxdark March 28 2010, 00:49:16 UTC

Oh, that was good, really good ♥ I really liked the beginning, how Aoi thinks about Uruha like fire, and the ending was also pretty sweet, it made me smile. ^_^

losseflame March 28 2010, 06:35:27 UTC

Thank you! Yay, I made someone smile!

lazedfantasy March 28 2010, 04:48:15 UTC

HHAHAHA XD You totally had me there, you tease :P
One moment i was thinking "WOOOOO HOT :D" and the next, i went, "UH? OH! AWWWWWW :D" You cruel tease, you ♥

I specially loved how sleepy Aoi got, and still managed the "We need to talk." Yeah Aoi, you're gonna be taken very seriously after those bites and scratches. Very seriously.

~Lovely, as usual :D
Thanks for sharing and making my Sunday breakfast so much better :D

losseflame March 28 2010, 06:33:14 UTC

Your very much welcome! Oh, yes, Aoi is in serious buisness mode. :D I vlushed so much in the creation of this, though. This is the most mature my writing as ever gotten, and now i'm struck dumb by the implied shmexytimes of it all.

losseflame March 28 2010, 06:37:56 UTC

*blushed. Told you I'm bad with typos.

lazedfantasy March 28 2010, 06:42:58 UTC

But you make even 'implied' so strong and beautiful!It lends an element of innocence to the situation:D Maybe you should write a spin-off to this, with the 'implied' parts in it ;P

Btw, how does one 'snort in a delicate manner'? :D
Oh Aoi you delicate, delicate flower/snorter :D

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cytograph March 28 2010, 04:52:29 UTC

Dear what are you talking about, that didn't fail at all! It was very lovely and realistic, I love your use of the concept of burning and its parallelism to Aoi and Uruha's affair (?).

Keep up the good work dear, I'd love to read more from you. Thanks for this wonderful piece! ♥

losseflame March 28 2010, 06:36:44 UTC

Your welcome! Thanks for giving such a lovely comment!