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simply_junsu July 25 2017, 08:55:54 UTC
I'm digging this very much!!
Sequel, please!!

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lorchenne July 25 2017, 14:39:43 UTC
Heehee! Maybe! Actually, I have a whole bunch of yama that are connected in one way or another. You might wanna check them out, too!
Thanks for reading and commenting!

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tachibananaaimi July 25 2017, 09:00:36 UTC
OH EHM GEE Hahahahahahahaha

Amazing hahaha very subtle Sho Painosente😏😖😻

loove it~ the ending blew me away and leaving it like that is so you hahaha but it really is best left like that 👌👏

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lorchenne July 25 2017, 14:40:35 UTC
"subtle" XD lams na

Ending was 90% Maki XD

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nicefinalbeam July 25 2017, 10:48:18 UTC
This was excellent! I love Ohno's attempts to communicate his desires without having to be direct and risk coming on too strong. I can completely see Ohno wanting to get his message across in a subtle way, and I loved his hints - who wouldn't want to come home to Ohno with buttons undone and handcuffs at the ready?

I honestly couldn't tell if Sho was missing the point, or 100% understanding in that clever mind of his and torturing Ohno slowly as part of those games. I could see it either way, and then that ending!! Sho knows Ohno better than anyone. ♥

I most appreciated that even with the bits of kink Ohno was trying to introduce, there were all these domestic scenes showing how comfortable and wonderful they are together. Great fic :D

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lorchenne July 25 2017, 14:48:26 UTC
Thank you for reading and this lovely critique! I'm so touched, senpai noticed me! (n w n)

I also enjoyed writing the domestic scenes the most! This AU is related to a collection of parallel universes of yama so I wanted to give the feeling that they're still starting out in their relationship but at the same time they know and understand each other deeply.

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makitachibanana July 25 2017, 11:24:49 UTC


"I do like being very hands-on in my work. It's not like I feel like I'm punished." She shrugged.........   She........ SHE


... )

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lorchenne July 25 2017, 14:49:38 UTC
I EDITED IT
IT'S BECAUSE YOU DIDN'T READ IT FIRST
haha thanks for the Keito pic tho

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koi_choshi July 26 2017, 07:13:53 UTC
This is really brilliant. I think everyone loves Yama but Yama is already too domestic and too "normal" as a couple that people are sometimes having difficulty making complicated stories out of them. But I think I love this one because you're able to show how domestic they are and of course, the "problem" (lol). Ohno was totally cute, trying to lure Sho using non-verbal cues. XD And that leather luggage? Does that mean that Ohno has been enjoyign the lifestyle since? XD

Based on Sho's character here, I really thought that he knew what Ohno is up to and he was playing along. That last part was the big giveaway. What a cliffhanger!!

Thanks for writing this!

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lorchenne July 26 2017, 18:43:12 UTC
AAA! Thank you for reading and commenting! I think it just so happened that I'm a little late in the fandom, is all. I'm glad you thought Ohno was cute, I really enjoyed writing him. XD About the luggage...well it's his precious collection! Who's to say Sho doesn't know about it though? ;)

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