Comments | lomonaaeren: Part Seven of 'The Long-Desired'

lomonaaeren

Part Seven of 'The Long-Desired'

Jul 29, 2009 09:16

the two hunters series, the long-desired, angst, creature!fic, rated r or nc-17, horror, chaptered novella, romance, ewe, dual pov: draco and harry

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lunasky3 July 29 2009, 16:58:24 UTC

OMG. So intense, so awesome, so m favorite story right now :D And I LOVED Draco using vampire metaphors. That kinda made my day :)

lomonaaeren July 29 2009, 18:23:12 UTC

Thank you!

neji_chan July 29 2009, 21:57:02 UTC

Yes! Finally read this! I admit, it was a wise decision waiting. I couldn't have keep reading past the first chapters of Viper otherwise. The story is amazing, the characterization perfect (most of all Hermione... Draco's too) but I couldn't feel any sympathy for Harry. That is, until he came to his senses after torturing the poor bird and realizing how much like a vampire he's been acting. Worse, because he didn't have instincts to back up his behaviour. I know, intellectually, why he was like that. I just couldn't stand it. Not the acting all mad, the denial that maybe, just maybe, he was acting like the things he hated. If he had admitted it (to himself, at least) then it'd would have been ok, for me. Frankly, it was fifth year Harry all over again, only far more dangerous.

This chapter made me feel sorry for Harry, love Draco even more (I love possessive!Draco, haha). And Hermione too, for not giving up on him (and her weird love of books ( ... )

lomonaaeren July 31 2009, 01:00:44 UTC

Thank you!

That's interesting that you couldn't feel any sympathy for Harry. I have sympathy for him simply because he suffered, but then again, the expression he chose for that grief was far from the best. And as you can see from this chapter, part of the reason for his denial was that, if he admitted he'd done something wrong, he would have to feel that his life was a waste so far.

And thank you for the compliments on the blood-drinking scenes! They're weird for me, as I really haven't written anything like that before.

neji_chan July 31 2009, 01:04:51 UTC

I started to feel sympathy once he came to his senses :P I would have before, if he had admitted he wasn't as sane as he thought. I do feel sympathy for killers, if they recognise what they are. Weird, huh? ::lol::

allycat_aria July 29 2009, 22:29:46 UTC

I'm glad that Harry has felt guilt for the bird. And I'm loving where Draco and Harry are going relationship-wise. Draco is able to understand Harry enough to give him what he needs. Although, I hope that Harry doesn't view himself as weak for breaking down. He obviously needed to let go. And the bond prevents him from hurting Draco, so he can be as violent in his breakdown as he needs.

I wonder how Ron is going to take all this. Or is Hermione going to keep it from him?

Such potent imagery of Harry (paranoid-hunter-extraordinaire) to fall asleep, standing, and TRUSTING Draco!

lomonaaeren July 31 2009, 01:01:26 UTC

Thank you!

Harry will try to feel weak, but it isn't going to work very well when he finds out what Draco really feels about that.

Hermione will keep it from him for now. She'll tell him later, after she's prepared him for the notion of Harry having a vampire, Malfoy lover.

vesperagain July 29 2009, 23:22:22 UTC

Aaaaah, perfect! Don't have any more words right now.

poetic_distaste July 30 2009, 03:40:22 UTC

you know l'v ebeen stalking your ff profile for almost - a year now? feels like it. gotta say tho, this is the most....in depth, emotional stories l've read. l have to say the last few novels of yours l've read seem to be - growing? in skill.

lomonaaeren July 31 2009, 01:02:04 UTC

Thank you! I do like to think that I'm a better writer than I was when I entered the fandom.

lomonaaeren July 31 2009, 01:01:38 UTC

Thank you!

kyaerie July 30 2009, 08:17:43 UTC

Nope, not too abrupt. After all, emotional storms like these do tend to rage and break all at once. And while there might be superficial backing away from realisations later, the bone-deep denial can no longer be sustained in the absence of all the pent-up emotion. So, completely credible.

And thus the mountain is traversed? I can't think what other huge plot turns may come - outside of the logistics of arranging their times together. And yet, this is only the half-point chapter.

Love, Ky.

lomonaaeren July 31 2009, 01:03:01 UTC

Thank you! That's essentially the course the story's going to take. Harry will still threaten and bluster and rage, but he no longer has that denial to sustain him, and Draco isn't going to be intimidated by little things like threats when he knows the bond won't let Harry hurt him.

Most of the rest of the story will simply be devoted to coming to a resting point where you can glimpse the future.