Crossroads 1/?

[analise010]

This fic is also cross posted to wolverinerogue and A03, but was written for xmenreversebang.

Author: analise010
X-Men Verse: A blend of the movie and comic ‘verses
Characters/Pairings: Logan/Rogue, Rogue/Gambit, with background Charles/Erik, Bobby Drake/Kitty Pryde
Rating: R
Word Count: 10K (for this chapter)
Warnings: Descriptions of violence.
Summary: When William Stryker and his

Comments

[dutchxfan]

Hi! Welcome to the community and thanks for posting this wonderful beginning. I had to approve you first, but from now on, you can post without restrictions.

I've read this chapter and I wanted to point out my favorite bits, but then I realized I'd be copying half the story. *lol* It's awesome. I love the talks between everyone and how they're portrayed. What a fun read and great dialogue.

As for the pairings:

Charles/Erik = wonderfully dramatic. Their story really is tragic, isn’t it? I really like how you’ve written their meeting.

Rogue/Gambit = TROUBLE! *lol*

Rogue/Logan = Yay for ambiguity. Heheh. Love that part where Jean observes them and that she can’t read Logan’s mind. It makes it more vague and angsty.

Just one thing: some sentences are cut off, so maybe it’s something that’s missed by your beta’s, or something went wrong with posting. Just to let you know. It’s not really bothering because you can fill in the blanks, but I thought I’d let you know in case the posting went wrong.

Hope to read more soon!

[kittenrescue]

Just wanted to say that I got the notification for this new fic and I'll be reading it whenever I get a decent block of time.

ETA: I finally got enough time to read this. I agree with everything Becca wrote - including the grammar issues. In particular this segment:

“Both of the telepaths are gone and Storm can’t camouflage us since she’s with her powers. The children are all asleep,”

“And what am I, chopped liver?” Storm replies warily.

'Storm can't camouflage us since she's with her powers' - Maybe I'm reading it wrong, but that didn't make sense to me.

Sorry, but as I beta for quite a few authors, some things just jumped out at me. I tell people it's an 'occupational hazard'. LOL

I really like the way you've incorporated aspects of the film and the comics(Stryker as a preacher) while also creating a new storyline. *Bravo*

I look forward to reading the continuation of this.

[analise010]

Grrrr. Sorry about that. My betas were with me during the first half, but kind of bailed towards the end. I'll try to go back and fix as many errors as I can. I'm a fast (though not always accurate) typist, so the errors sneak in there.

I'm looking forward to finishing this too. Thanks for reading. :D